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Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2012.08.17 - 03:53PM Title: Chapter 1: Support
This is just lovely and very romantic. However, the timeline I think is a bit off. In DH, Teddy was kissing Victoire and seeing her off. Albus was 11 so by my calculation,, Teddy would be between the ages of 17 and 19. So James Sirius would be 12 or 13, roughly 4 - 5 years gap.
Anyhow, the reality of how the Ministry is and the law brought about because of Sirius are excellent ideas. So real. Very political.
Author's Response: Thanks! I wasn't that crazy about the timeline JK used and decided to alter it a bit in this story in regards to the children's ages.
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2012.08.16 - 01:47PM Title: Chapter 1: Support
Interesting first chapter. Ginny's pregnancy will add an extra wrinkle to the whole story. I like the idea of Ginny not returning to Hogwarts and marrying Harry. My one critique would be to break up some of the longer blocks of text. Several of the longer paragraphs could have been easily broken into smaller paragraphs.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. After everything Ginny went through at Hogwarts that last year and the final battle, it never really made sense to me for her to return. In fact the only way I ever saw her returning was if Harry did. Thanks for your input on the longer paragraphs, I'll definately have a look at that and watch myself in the future. Usually I'm reviewing your stories so this is a nice twist now that I've finally decided to write. Thanks again!
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2012.08.16 - 10:44AM Title: Chapter 1: Support
Quite and interesting beginning, but it really lacks a true ending. It would be a great jumping off point for a longer story though, as it sets up some interesting possibilities.
Author's Response: There's still a few more chapters to go and I'll try to post them over the next few days. Thanks for your comments.
