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Reviewer: YelloWitchGrl Signed Date: 2014.08.28 - 10:14PM Title: Chapter 7

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That was lovely! I truly enjoyed it. Well done :)



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.04.29 - 09:34AM Title: Chapter 7

That made me grin....maybe they will take it in turns to stun Sirius so they can obscure the Ineosieve...lol!

And interesting that thei guide was Arianna



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2010.08.29 - 05:33PM Title: Chapter 7

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Sweet one:-)



Reviewer: AoiKazeToMidoriAme Signed Date: 2010.07.18 - 08:24AM Title: Chapter 7

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Wow, that was a great finish to your story! I really liiked the frank discussion that they had about everything before the final battle happened. One small thing, your entry for march 1998, GInny is 16, not fifteen. But, wow great finish. I can't believe you surprised me like that with the girl being Dumbledor's little sister. Of course, the pieces were all there, and I should have picked up on it the instant she was introduced, but, the story seemed so straight forward that I did't think to make that connection to anyone in the known HP universe. I think it was the honesty of the secret and the honesty in the way you told your story. Great job with that. The narrator felt so genuine you were able to slip that through. An honest narrator is almost always a good thing in stories like this. Also, it taught me a lesson, a narrator written so reliably can allow those little turns to take the reader by surprise in a was those who make their stories have sneaky twists never can seem to manage. Thanks so much for this little fic, and than new bit of writting wisdom. ~Ran



Reviewer: Yunchao Signed Date: 2010.07.14 - 11:32PM Title: Chapter 7

Good job! I enjoyed your story very much. I liked how you were able to really develop the relationship that Lily and Ginny had. It really brought out those characters. I also liked the background that you gave as Lily's childhood. The explanation that their guide was really Adriana near the ending was brilliant as well! I've just read this story for judging. Thanks for writing!

P.S. I also enjoyed the James/Sirius humor throughout very much.



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2010.07.13 - 08:50AM Title: Chapter 7

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What a great finale. I hated to see the story end. You developed and paced it in such an effective manner that the whole tale just pulled you in. I came away feeling for all the characters, and knowing them all the better. It was a great read. Thanks—Eric B.



Reviewer: bengpotter31 Signed Date: 2010.07.09 - 10:14AM Title: Chapter 7

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Great story. I read the whole thing through which is why I'm only reviewing now. I knew from the start who the girl guide was. But why did they only see Albus a year after his death?

Author's Response: I think that people who are used to giving answers and being in charge will naturally assume that role no matter what situation they are thrust into. I don't think Albus would have been able to allow James and Lily (and Sirius) to stumble about on their own. He would have tried to give hints and clues that may or may not have helped. But, when it comes down to it, I just didn't want him there until the end.



Reviewer: LilyLady Signed Date: 2010.07.09 - 09:52AM Title: Chapter 7

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That was beautiful. I agree that it ended up feeling rushed at the end, but since you already addressed that, I'll let it go lol.

That really was wonderful. You did a great job.

Author's Response: Thank you! Sigh...that last chapter is more like a summary of what the ending should have been then an actual ending. But thanks for giving me a pass on it this time!



Reviewer: lizzi-mae21 Signed Date: 2010.07.08 - 08:24PM Title: Chapter 7

Gerat job Sissy! I like it better that you didn't say who the "Guide" was until the end and I really love that you wrote about Lily's past- I wasn't expecting that part at all. LOVE it! Now you need to write another one that I can read :D

Author's Response: I knew I could keep some part of the story from you! And I promise to write another one you can read, but you have to finish one of your fics first. muwhahahaha!



Reviewer: Lord Dreadnault Signed Date: 2010.07.06 - 11:05PM Title: Chapter 7

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(Judged for challenge) Congrats on a story well done. You definitely seem to have your grammar, dialogue, and characters under control. You also seemed to have keen insights on the deeper aspects of Harry, his parents, and even Ginny. Good luck.



Reviewer: Green Eyes Signed Date: 2010.07.03 - 09:57AM Title: Chapter 7

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I really liked this story. I particularly liked the dynamic between Ginny and Lily. I guess I did think that the skills that Giiny had acquired as a result of her training with Lily would somehow be used to help Harry defeat Voldemort. Maybe I missed someting? Anyway, very nice job.

Author's Response: Thank you! I struggle with writing outside of cannon, so this was never going to stray very far from what happened in the books. Dumbledore said Harry's power was love. While Lily and James would have expected the same thing (bringing down Voldemort with huge Bat-winged Bogeys!) Ariana's goal was to ensure that Harry accepted love. There is another story that I doubt I'll ever put onto paper about Ariana manipulating the Weasleys into being late 1 Sept 1991 and Ron into sitting with Harry. She gave gentle pushes to Hermione, too. The one she didn't feel she could assist, however, was Ginny. Lily was supposed to help Ginny discover her own strength and personality. So, no, she didn't help directly defeat Voldemort, but without accepting and understanding love, Harry wouldn't have been able to sacrafice himself for his friends. Quite a bit of manipulation for such a subtle thing, but Ariana is far-Seeing and had a fair guess of what the alternative would be.



Reviewer: Enchantedgurls Signed Date: 2010.07.02 - 03:55PM Title: Chapter 7

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Nice job! This feels very canon to me. It's nice to think that Lily and James were so involved in Harry's life, even though they couldn't raise him. And I liked reading your interpretation of canon through the eyes of Harry's parents. Great work here! I wouldn't mind another chapter... :)

Author's Response: Thank you...I'm glad if felt canon to you because that is what I was going for. And I do plan on writing a better ending...which will probably be more than one chapter. But no guaruntees on how quickly it'll happen.



Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2010.07.01 - 08:34PM Title: Chapter 7

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A bit rushed, but nice.

Author's Response: Thank you - hopefully I will be able to come back to this in a month and do a better final chapter (which would probably be more like 2-3 chapters) when I'm not rushing myself. But onto other projects for now!



Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed Date: 2010.07.01 - 10:19AM Title: Chapter 7

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Very nice. Good use of the prompt, and well thought out story. My only complaint was that the ending seemed a little rushed. It would have been nice to have more of the resolution.

Thanks!

Author's Response: Thank you! I agree - the last chapter was entirely too rushed. But I WAS rushing to finish it in time for the contest and sick to boot. I'll probably come back and redo the last chapter, which will make it two-three chapters longer. But not until next month; got a couple of others on my plate right now!




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