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Reviews For A Dark Moment

Reviewer: blackhair Signed Date: 2010.05.23 - 11:49AM Title: Part III

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Well it would have been ridiculous to have killed Harry with Gun shot
Great fic though



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2009.07.21 - 07:43AM Title: Part III

That last sentence from Ginny is a stroke of genius!

Excellent fic. Congratulations!



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2009.07.21 - 07:36AM Title: Part II

I nearly cried a river here!



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2009.07.21 - 07:26AM Title: Part I

LOL. Trust a wife and mother in law... not to mention sisters in law!

Seriously, though. This is really scary if it be known that the Hwllows do exist!



Reviewer: Abraxan Signed Date: 2009.04.28 - 02:42AM Title: Part III

Wow, you packed a lot of story into a few words! It would've been nice if you'd taken a little more time with Harry's return - his ending up in a Muggle hospital with both Hallows doesn't make sense, given how much the Dollmaker (good, creepy villain, BTW) wanted them, and there's also the question of who told Harry the Dollmaker had been found, killed, etc. And if "they" found him in the hospital the previous day, why did Ron and Ginny not know about it? That's kind of a big logic hole IMO, but still, it's a fun story. George being the master of the wand is an interesting twist! Keep up the good work!

Abraxan



Reviewer: FirePhoenix86 Signed Date: 2009.03.19 - 03:58AM Title: Part III

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lol, great job, but i think someone out of the whole ministry would have thought to check a muggle hospital...good story though the Julia thing was kinda creepy, and the missing body parts...eesh...it's like the Gormogon thing on Bones...



Reviewer: FirePhoenix86 Signed Date: 2009.03.19 - 03:51AM Title: Part II

wow, this was just...wow...the whole Julia this was creepy weird...



Reviewer: FirePhoenix86 Signed Date: 2009.03.19 - 03:44AM Title: Part I

The last part about Molly feeding him was the way to get her to stop fretting, was hilarious, even more so with mentioning it didn't work on Ginny. I laughed loudly...



Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2009.03.13 - 06:28AM Title: Part III

Don't get how George is the master of the wand... But very good story really liked what you did with this challenge and how you wrote this.

Till next time,
Tad



Reviewer: jacsmompat Signed Date: 2009.03.10 - 09:31PM Title: Part III

excellent ending. read for competition



Reviewer: jacsmompat Signed Date: 2009.03.10 - 09:27PM Title: Part II

good chapter. read for challenge



Reviewer: jacsmompat Signed Date: 2009.03.10 - 09:19PM Title: Part I

Very good start. I loved the part where Ron is climbing out the window to get away from the women Very vintage Ron. Read for challenge



Reviewer: Yunchao Signed Date: 2009.03.02 - 03:15PM Title: Part III

Well done! I just read this story for judging. That was a very intense and action packed story. I liked how deep and interesting the plot was. The story grabbed me and forced me to keep reading so that was very well done. Try to draw out the action and separate it out a bit. At times, it felt like the story was moving too fast for the reader to really comprehend the situation. Thanks for writing!



Reviewer: jennyelf Signed Date: 2009.03.01 - 10:28PM Title: Part III

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A good story, especially for a first story. Thanks for sharng it. I'm glad you didn't have Harry die from the gun. :)



~Jenn :)



Reviewer: MinistryMalcontent Signed Date: 2009.02.28 - 09:48AM Title: Part III

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I enjoyed your story. You packed a great deal of action and drama into a small package. It was still enjoyable.

Good luck in the Challenge!



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2009.02.28 - 09:26AM Title: Part III

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LOL. You cannot have George be its master... oh Merlin help the universe!

Congratulations for completing this 3 part fic and entering the challenge/competition.

I enjoyed reading your work. Well done, you.



Reviewer: tjshelton Signed Date: 2009.02.28 - 08:51AM Title: Part III

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George as the master of the Elder wand? Actually, out of all the Weasley's George is the one I'd trust the most with it. Perhaps Bill as well, but George is the best...



Reviewer: ebonydawnpotter Signed Date: 2009.02.26 - 09:04PM Title: Part II

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You've managed, in a short span of writing to cultivate quite a story. It's well written, for sure. Harry and Ginny's characters are well within canon, and you've managed to portray both the soft, sweet side, and the fiery temper of Ginny, a feat I am impressed with, since mostly it's one or the other in stories. Interesting twist with that of the use of a Muggle gun... I'm interested to see where you take this.

Cheers,
-ebonydawnpotter



Reviewer: Valandar Signed Date: 2009.02.26 - 03:09AM Title: Part II

Umm... this means that now, texhnically, Harry is no longer the Master of the Elder Wand - Gunther is. Unless harry comes back and beats him, himself, that is.



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2009.02.25 - 06:48PM Title: Part II

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Oh dear Merlin. A killing curse, he could survive, but a muggle gun with real bullets? How on earth did Guther even know about a muggle gun?

A very good but rather fast-paced chapter. However, I suppose since this is an entry to a challenge, you are bound by rules on length.

Very good work!




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