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Reviewer: FlaGinnyGirl Signed Date: 2010.04.19 - 12:55AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

“Be careful not to deflower any of them, Harry.”
Really? you just couldn't resist could you ???? I'm glad Harry is working so hard to bring the houses together. Ok, we KNOW Harry hates DD, DD f&^*ed up his life, we get it. Does Harry ever stop letting his temper and anger towards DD get the best of him? (Does it sound like I'm whinning ??? I hope so) ok I'm back to me ( sssaaayyyy, I guess there could be 2 of ME in here...)
The scene in the RoR was painful to read but ince again tho' not even there Ginny comes to the rescue. That Hannah quite the agressive litlle witch isn't she. I'm glad Prpf McG spoke with DD maybe he'll get his head out of his arse now.

Author's Response: Hey B, No way I could resist. It's just too fun to contrast where the young witches are maturity-wise with the clueless boy wizards. There's another scene a bit later that covers the same ground. Harry's on a mission. The number 1 man in his life - Arthur Weasley - has suggested something, and Harry is commited to bringing the house barriers by himself. As far as Harry's temper, he has held in ten years of anger due to the Dursleys, so DD has become the target due to his actions. At this point, DD just doesn't get HP, so it's a learning process for both of them. I think there are several of 'you' and they come out at different times. :-).

Harry's on an emotional roller coaster, so the RoR has become a safe place for him, at least as a place where he can 'express' his anger and get it out of his system. From an emotional standpoint and for healing, Ginny instinctively understands Harry and has become the one he thinks of first when he's down. Arthur and McG fill that role from the adult side. McG is the translator between Harry and DD, because she understands both (for the most part) and can convey in understandable terms to both of them what they should consider about the other - a very vital role at this point. Thanks for another great review! -- Jim



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2009.12.03 - 03:54PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.10.13 - 12:13AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

Wonder if Dumbledore will actually do any of the things he told McGonagall to his fullest extent or just make a show of doing it. Do agree think Harry needs a male role model though I think right now that it would be Remus rather than Dumbledore.

I would of really liked to see what exactly you would of done if you continued this story on through school you have already made several tweeks that would make the plot lines for years one to three impossible I think if you borrowed them from cannon.

When I read him going through who he should talk to was really hoping you would of had him go to Percy think that would of been a great twist and a good ready LOL if you can't tell really Percy in this story wish would see more of him.



Author's Response: Finally, Harry does have some male role models. In addition to Remus - and hopefully Dumbledore, at some point - don't forget Mr Weasley, who was exactly what Harry needed when he reached the Weasleys'.

Tad, rest assured that I have lots of ideas for taking the story to the end of first year and beyond.

Good suggestion with Percy. He is finally acting like a Weasley, and at this point, sees Harry as another brother. Thanks, Jim



Reviewer: charlz1983 Signed Date: 2008.09.17 - 03:23PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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i think when minerva goes back to her room, she will be pouring herself a rather large scotch after all that, its about time someone bitch slapped dumbledore on the goings on with snape and his treatment of harry!

and i like the reference to quirrell in the beginning - smooth!

and harry and hannah - i don't see that going anywhere, he will only have eyes for one person, although he may not realise it just yet!

Author's Response: It's gotta be scotch, right! I never could figure out why DD let Snape treat the non-Slytherin students that way in canon. So, here we have revenge of the fan fic writer.

Had to get rid of Quirrell, getting lost in Albania sounded close enough. You don't think H and H will last? Hmmm. Thanks for another fun review, Jim



Reviewer: Belcris Signed Date: 2008.09.02 - 01:23AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

Sorry it's been so long since I've had a chance to read your wonderful story. As you know I've been working on my own, which I will start publishing within a matter fo days. I have to say though that I still love your story and the slant on Harry's life that you have taken with it. Bravo. :)

Chris

Author's Response: Chris, No apology needed! I really understand the amount of time writing and real life suck up. I'm just really pleased that you continue to like the story and are taking the time to leave comments. Thanks! -- Jim



Reviewer: TGIF Signed Date: 2008.08.28 - 11:03AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Well, Well, Well...Harry's starting early, isn't he? Hannah Abbott? lol. Poor kid.

I amend what I said about everyone's reaction to Malfoy now. Their reaction to him putting Slytherin in the negative even before the Feast is understandable.

I'm glad to see Harry at least trying to sleep in his bed. The Wardrobe is a comfort to him, and to see him actively seeking to break his pattern gives me hope! I'm also glad that Ginny's letters seem to have a good effect on Harry. Seeing how he can think of waht she would do or say and it'll make him feel better is great. Ginny is Harry's sanctuary. It warms my heart to see that the Harry you've created has something that special.

I was of two minds on how Harry would recieve Hermione. One was not so positive. She has a very...strong personality that could be very overwhelming. The other was that they could bond over academics. It seems that - at this point - its the former. Hopefully they'll get past that. I'm assuming that Hermione wants to be Harry's friend, and was upset to see him befriending all these other people (girls, more specifically) from other houses and rejecting her friendship.

I've (sort of) made peace with this DD. I think he's spent so much time dealing with things on an intellectual level so far removed from other people that human relations and trust and those things that are SO important are in a sense almost foreign to him. Its amazing. Sometimes the smartest people I met can be incredibly stupid.

Christine

Author's Response: I love your analysis, Christine! Harry sees these new acquaintances as friends, nothing more. Hannah responded to Harry's friendliness in a more serious manner. There's another girl who'd love to, also, but she's holding back more than Hannah did. Any guesses who?

Draco is upsetting everyone with his record-breaking point loss. You'll see where that leads us. The wardrobe is the comfort of a known space, even if the thought is depressing to us. But you nailed the fact that in this story Ginny is his sanctuary. That's a wonderful way to state it. (I may steal it! :-))

I wanted to introduce Hermione in a somewhat different fashion. I think there could be a reasonable parallel between her school experience and Harry's. without the physical aspect, of course. I wanted to bring that in initially. Keep watching as their relationship developes.

I'm also going to steal your comments regarding DD. You've captured it in two sentences. I see him sitting in his office, essentially an ivory tower, and dispensing wisdom and orders from on high. Harry is objecting to this remote control and trying to figure out why DD has done the things he has. Thanks for getting exactly why H and DD are currently not connecting. Great review! -- Jim



Reviewer: Abraxan Signed Date: 2008.08.27 - 08:55AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Oh, well done! Minerva is every bit the spitfire she is in canon - even more so. I love that! Snape is still a greasy git and Remus is loyal and way too humble. Dumbledore might come out of this resembling the man he's supposed to be yet - I sure hope he does, anyway.

I liked the way Harry handled the Rememberall incident with Malfoy - nicely done! And Harry's now a lady-killer, with girls draping themselvea all over him! Yikes, at ELEVEN??? The poor boy will be totally warped for that one!

Your joke about the snapdragons made me giggle.

Well done all around!

Author's Response: Thanks, Lynda! I've loved writing Minerva and hope still remains for Albus. As we discussed, Harry is comfortable with girls, but to him, they're just friends. Thanks for getting the snapdragon joke. -- Jim



Reviewer: I_love_hpforever Signed Date: 2008.06.30 - 12:45AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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LUPIN!!!!! *SQUEEEEE!!!* I LOVE Remus and I'm SOOO happy you have him as the DADA teacher for this chapter. Especially since Fred and George's comments eariler in the story about how for the past two years they have had new DADA teacher's I knew it probably wasn't going to be Quirrel as he had been there at least for a year before because everyone knew him as the DADA Professor.

I love Daphne and Tracy and I've actually always liked Blaise too. ^^ I love how Harry is simply building the relationships and simply being himself. Of course, he is no where near as open as he is with Ginny or the Weasley's yet with everyone else but it is obvious he is working on it even if you aren't flat out telling us in words, but simply through Harry's actions. This is why I like your style of writing so much.

Added to the previous stuff I love how he approached Hannah and Susan. Now I'm trying to remember but Harry has yet to approach McGonagall if I'm correct. Of course I have a feeling this is because he is trying to get people from every house first but I just wanted to make sure I didn't miss anything. ^^

First of all, I have to agree, that scene is one of my favorites too. Of course, Snape was always up and down for me though in your story he seems to be heading down the more hated side. Anyways, now I have to finish reading the Snape section.

Again Ron is thick, but really, if he wasn't what would we expect?

Deflower? Wow.....wow....That's all I got to say. I'll have to steal that from you, you understand. My best friend is just gonna get a kick out of that next time I talk to her.

I love your use of language when describing Harry's emotions. Beautiful and flowing and expertly done. I don't think I have told you that before but you have an amazing way with words which is why I think the story flows as well as it does.

Hmmm, what will happen to Snape? From what Lupin is insinuating I have a feeling he's gonna get sacked or something because otherwise life will be more then hell on earth for Harry. I like how Lupin was waiting for Harry outside the room, very clever.

Harry and Hannah? You wound me! Of course, Harry is slightly oblivious as of yet but Hannah's open flirting...does not surprise me actually but even still. -_^

Oh, the Dumbeldore-McGonagall talk, I'm TOTALLY looking forward to that! Seriously. I liked how Lupin is so concerned about Harry. By the time Lupin had met him in the series it was a bit to late to form a STRONG bond with Harry like the one I see developing in your story and I know I seem to compare your story to the books a lot but truthfully...I think your story is better written and I do enjoy it a bit more. *shifty eyes* SHHH, don't tell many people...I don't need guys showing up at my house in black suits asking to erase my memory!

Probation? Probation I feel is not going to be enough but then again I guess I'll have to wait and see. As for Dumbeldore, I have this nagging feeling that he is simply agreeing with McGonagall to make her happy. It may just be me but it sort of seemed as if he was waving her off. No need to create another enemy kind of thing. If this is the case it's probably his worst decision yet, and if not maybe I'm reading a bit too much into it. *shrugs* Either way, I'm off to the final chapter you have posted so far. I don't know what I will do when I don't see that little "next" button! Till then Jim!

~Kat

Author's Response: You like Lupin, eh, Kat? Me, too! He is just too connected to Harry's parents not to bring him in now. Plus, Quirrell is one of my least favorite professors.

Harry has not approached McG yet concerning house selection. He just believes it's too early and wants to focus on getting to know some other students to determine if it's even feasible.

Deflower? I couldn't resist using that word in that circumstance. I do love words, their sounds, meanings, how they work together, so your comments are greatly appreciated! I won't tell anyone, since I don't want those memory erasing guys to show up on your doorstep!

Dumbledore has known he needed to address these issues with Snape. McG's discussion finally moved him to action. Snape is too fun a character to get rid of too quickly. Let's see how he responds over a period of time. I tend to think acting nice and actually teaching could make him explode. We'll see. I can't believe you've almost caught up. Thanks for all your great comments! -- Jim



Reviewer: ssariesen Signed Date: 2008.06.20 - 04:05PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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i really liked McGonagall's line "just make sure you don't protect his childhood and lose the boy". you really have a way with words i haven't seen in a while. keep up the brilliant work,

Author's Response: Between you and me, that's one of my favorite lines, too. It seems that Dumbledore is more concerned with the concept than the actual boy in front of him. Thanks for reading the story and for your kind comments. - Jim



Reviewer: Wanderer Signed Date: 2008.06.17 - 08:09AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Arrgh, I was hoping Snape would be sacked.

Well it may not be as bad as Iowa, but all these rain storms have had me constantly repairing and digging drainage channels on my Farm here in Michigan. Luckily I am keeping ahead of the water flow.

Author's Response: Wanderer, I hope the water in your area stays where it should and doesn't flow above the banks. Good luck!

As for Snape, maybe you could Stun him and use his body like a sack of sand. Free of charge! Let me know. :-) Anyhow, you know my characters never move in a linear fashion. More to come. Hope all is well with you. -- Jim



Reviewer: melkior Signed Date: 2008.06.16 - 08:24PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Jim,

now that my own writing is back on track, I can go back and do those review I wanted to, but never had the time. It's funny how even if I write a very short review, I still end up thinking about what I'm going to write for at least 20 minutes.

This time it's no exception. First of all, I haven't reviewed for long and there's so much to be said, but other readers already raised those points. Second, you have managed to surprise me. So I think I'll stick to the second part.

As I said many times, Saving Harry is a hard story to read, but that doesn't make it a bad one. Quite the opposite, it's an excellent story and as much as I have appreciated it before, for the past few chapters the appreciation has grown tenfold.

To put it in simple terms, you managed to weave a rather complex tapestry of plot elements. Much more complex than I ever thought this story would be. And, well... I already expected much from you, but you have given us even more.

The relationships you're building around Harry are amazing, and quite frankly, sometimes I have a hard time tracking them, but you haven't gone overboard and you keep them reigned in. Your depictions of McGonagall and Dumbledore are very good, and the reactions Harry has to both of them feel natural. Hannah is a nice twist by the way.

But most of all, the best thing in the story are still Harry's internal monologues and his emotions, and you're doing a damn fine job of writing them.

In the beginning, I awaited your new chapters eagerly, but I needed some time to get into a certain frame of mind before actually reading them. The preparation time before reading is still there, but it doesn't take long at all anymore and your story hasn't lost its vividness.

And it still makes me think of my own childhood and how lucky I was. Even though SH is only fiction, it's moving enough. And that's all that matters. I can give you no higher praise than that.

Dino

Author's Response: Wow, Dino, that's quick a review! Before I get to that, though, good luck with your newest story, A Change of Heart. I understand it's a medical story. Sorry, couldn't resist!

From the original concept, the story has grown on me. My original intent was to be finished by now, but the characters and events have conspired to consistently introduce new themes and personalities to explore. Whatever complexity there may be has resulted from those new ideas and the dialogues with some of the readers of Saving Harry.

Thank you for the kind words regarding the internal monologues. Coming from someone who brilliantly writes "asides" that means a lot. I hope you continue to enjoy the story. I'll read your new one soon, and as you are well aware, I am looking forward to your next update of Meddle. Thanks for leaving your comments. Best, Jim



Reviewer: MyGinevra Signed Date: 2008.06.16 - 10:20AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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JIm,

This was the most enjoyable chapter in this marvelouse story. It is good to see Harry moving into a normal life -- granted that he is clueless about a few things, namely girls -- and he is still struggling with the legacy of Bumbledore's incompetence. But he is also gradually starting to take control of his life, and he's also realizing more and more that those who love him are there to help him: Remus, Minerva, the Weasleys, and of course especially Ginny. I know you are not planning to take this story that far into the future, but it's wonderful to imagine how their budding relationship will grow and mature over the next few years.

There were so many intriguing and moving (emotionally, I mean) parts of this chapter. We finally got to meet Snape, and finally someone dealt with the foul git the way he should have been in canon: as an abuser of the children in his care. I have seen the argument that you put in DD's mouth -- that Harry can learn through adversity -- and Minerva demolishes it as it should be. I never understood why canon DD never said anything to Snape about the way he was treating Harry. Maybe he was afraid that Snape would turn back to Voldemort, but surely he could have tried something.

Minerva's reaction and lecture were perfect. Compassionate and professional. It seems like she got through to DD, but we'll see. I think he reamins part of the clueless ones.

You did perfectly all the scenes in which poor Harry has girls thrust upon him, Hannah especially. But his mental picture of what Ginny's advice would be is priceless. Harry's cluelessness is probably part of what attracts girls to him but with Ginny lurking in the background, they had better be careful. :-)

Another outstanding chapter, Jim. Saving Harry is becoming more and more compelling as it progresses. And congratulations on your making it onto the Top 25 Hitcount list; it's well deserved and no surprise.

Peter

Author's Response: Thanks, Peter, for both the "best" comment and the congrats on entering the Top 25 list for hitcount. I'll never catch your wonderful story, The Hogs Head, though!

Taking Control? Hmm - that might make for an interesting story. But why does that term sound familiar? You're spot on with Harry responding to the support he is receiving. It enables him to break out of the Dursley-created neutrality he needed to exist.

Minerva has stepped into the vacuum created by DD's decisions and distance. I think she's expended all of her patience waiting for Albus to do "the right thing." Now, we need Remus to step up. You will see how Albus handles Snape in the next chapter. Likewise. Harry's education in witches continues apace. You're probably right about Harry and his purity and innocence. I wonder, though, if they've ever run into a BB Hex?

You know how much I appreciate your reviews. Thanks for your insightful and articulate comments! Best, Jim



Reviewer: annep Signed Date: 2008.06.15 - 03:54PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

Poor Hermione! Harry is nice to every girl except her. Of course her lack of social skills isn’t helping her at all, but her loneliness is so obvious. I hope the situation changes soon, though it won’t be with the help of a troll this time.

Speaking of the lack of troll, well really lack of Quirrell—that was quite a surprize. Does that mean no Voldemort encounter for Harry during first year? That would fit in with the focus of your story, however, so it works.

Minerva is still wonderful. Her parting line was perfect: “A noble objective, Albus, just make sure you don’t protect his childhood and lose the boy.” This was Albus’ problem in JKR’s story also and waiting ridiculously long to tell Harry the prophecy, in order to spare him the burden of such news, nearly lost Harry in the Ministry. Too bad Albus has to get slapped, very hard, in order to see that his machinations aren’t always the best way to do things.



Author's Response: Hi Anne, Hermione and Harry get a lot of page time in the next chapter, so hang in there! Ah, no Quirrell = no troll, possibly. Do we even know if DD moved the Stone to Hogwarts? Sorry, I couldn't resist.

Thanks for picking up on Minerva's parting line. Your analysis is exactly why I included it. Albus has been making decisions figuratively from the top of Mt Olympus, so working at this detailed level is slightly beyond what he's used to. Kind of educating the educator, eh? Thanks for your review. -- Jim



Reviewer: Rexnos Signed Date: 2008.06.15 - 03:54PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Dumbledore keeps saying he's going to fix things, but he hasn't managed to do even one thing right in this entire story. I can easily see him losing Harry's trust entirely. I don't necessarily know what the outcome of that would be, but it would be fairly tramatic for the approaching war with Voldemort. Dumbledore needs to get his act together.

Great stuff altogether. I'm pretty interested in where you're headed with the Hannah/Harry thing you started up. She's encroaching on Ginny's territory even if she isn't aware of it. I figure Harry will accidentally lose control and chase her off in an upcoming chapter. I can't wait until this story progresses to second year. Harry will be in much better shape with Ginny around. The diary will be an interesting plot device...

Later,
Rex

Author's Response: Rex, Can I say wait until the next chapter before we bury DD? We'll see whether Minerva's comments reached him. Regardless, he does need to do something to start earning Harry's trust.

The Hannah/Harry dilemma also will be seen in the next chapter, and Hermione will be there, too. In Hannah's behalf, she's clueless about Ginny, as are the other girls. And the story will only address part of the first year, since the focus is on the effect of the Dursley decade on Harry as he enters Hogwarts. Thanks for reviewing.-- Jim



Reviewer: lkc159 Signed Date: 2008.06.15 - 06:04AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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I had to stop in the middle (somewhere areound chapter 16) to go and sleep, and the first thing I did when I woke up in the morning was to come back to this story.

The only other story having kept my interest all through is "Nightmares of Futures Past" by Viridian. Yours is fantastically written, and definitely one of my favourites :)

H/G and co:
I love all the parts about Harry and Ginny, especially your portrayal of him and his outer and inner selves, and her attempts to draw him out of his shell (and the Weasleys as well!) The new approach to Hermione that I've never seen anyone take before (or at least, I haven't read any) was also fresh, though I'mI wonder if it's truly because of her desire to outperform everyone else this time... But how will you settle the question of HRH in the original timeline? I have no doubt you're going to take care of it well enough, looking at how well the story has been going so far. Loved the Harry and Neville scene in chapter 22. The stuttering... heh.

I also love the new Draco Malfoy and the attention he's getting, but what happened to kill everyones opinions of him as compared to the original run? (Though I think Zabini's a bit out of character, but since this story's changed the main plot of HP anyway so...)

Dumbledore & Staff:
Many stories happen to show Dumbledore as an extremely manipulative person who doesn't bother about what others think but just does what he does, and it was getting really really old... until you wrote it. Having the scene where he was talking to Fawkes was just brilliant. And I thought Harry thinking Dumbledure having murdered his parents was a nice twist. Minerva was also an enjoyable character, and we get to see her lesser-shown inner self, which made her much more human to me. Remus... I can't say much about him so far, but the connection between him and Harry seem to be a bit... strained?

Your Snape doesn't seem to be as malevolent as the actual or compared to some of the other fanfic authors... (Just making an observation... I shall form my opinion of him later)

And I wonder if Miss Rae and Samantha will make a reappearance, or are they just part of the scenery?

I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter and waiting to see where the plot is going!

Sadly, I can't give anything above a 10 for this story...

Author's Response: Hi lkc, Thanks for such wonderful comments! The H/G relationship, with her trying to bring out Harry's inner self, is the key element of the story. Hermione's issues will receive further clarification in the next chapter, and the HRH relationship will be at the center of that. Draco's attitude of entitlement was built on a house of cards, so it's fun to have him knock down those cards. Zabini, Tracey and Daphne are just stepping into the vacuum.

DD truly thinks he has and is doing the right things for Harry. Minerva's intervention is finally opening his eyes to the fact that his approach has been based on the wrong considerations. It will be an evolutionary process. You're right about the Harry/Remus connection. Remus' taking Harry's memory of Snape's actions is a proactive step in the right direction. Lots of activity and resolutions to come. Thanks for your comments, and tens are always appreciated! -- Jim



Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed Date: 2008.06.15 - 01:21AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Great chapter--and wonderful portrayal of McGonagall. I love how you've made her character--she's such a great ally for Harry!
Please, oh please let Ginny not get upset and treat Harry poorly for Hannah's flirting--Ginny has to know that Harry doesn't like it, doesn't want it, and doesn't know what it is!!!

Author's Response: Hey, Duke, I was really looking forward to McG confronting DD. Now, we'll see how he responds to her "suggestions."

I love your description Harry not liking, wanting or knowing what it is. That's exactly the situation. I won't give away the resolution, but everyone involved learns from it.

Thanks, as always, for your comments and requests! -- Jim



Reviewer: gen d Signed Date: 2008.06.14 - 08:50PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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I'm so sorry that I haven't reviewed this story earlier, I just became a member the day before yesterday and found out how to review, I know that sounds lame, and I really am sorry. I will strive to review every chapter from now on and plan to go back and reviwe the previos chapters when I have time.
I just wanted to tell you this this chaper as well as storry have been wodrefully written! I usaully dn't friend fics that divert from canon as stronly as this one has, however ,from the moment I finished that butifully written and ultimatley sadening first chapter, I couldn't put this storry down. You really give a realistic picture how much Harry probably suffered as a result of living with the Dursely, that Jo glossed over in the series.I don't want to go into to many specifics about what I thought about the previous chapters as I plan to reread those chapters, inorder to give more discriptive and elabberative reviews, but I am extremely glad, he is now living with the Weasleys and no llonger the Dursely's. They really should be made to face thier actions and be charged wth child abuse. I hate to say this but you let them off entirely to easy. Thankfully, Harry has the Weasely, especailly Ginny and Minerva in his corner, to help him become the well loved, confident and self secured child whom he should be.

Now lets discuss what I thought of this chapter. First I really have ta applaud you for doing away with Qurelle (sp?) and instating Remus as the substitue Defense teacher. I hope his stay is permanent. I also have to simpathize with Harrry about knocking Michael down when trying to disarm him it really must be a pain for him to have to continually rebember to controle the amount of power that he uses in front of people. Secondly it was really funny to see Malfoy get caught flying, when he wasn;t suposed to by Houch In the flying lesson, it serves hin right for taighting Naville, Secondly I'm glad that Harry is still reaching out to Susan and co, despite his insecurities. It's kind of coute that Hannah has developed a crush on him, thankfully Harry doesn'y reciprocate, imagin if Ginny found out hat the two liked eachother -that would crush her. Thirdly, can I just say that I REALLY want to beat Snape to a pulp right now! Thankfully Remus was able to dicover thids diplorable information and exstracted the memmory from Harry as proof. I really feel bad for Remus though, he feels to helpless and doesn"t know how to help Harry. The amount of anger that Harry feels for Albus worries me, even if it is mostly justifyable. If left unchecked this anger could lead to a hudge problem's , Harry already has negative feelings for many adults and if Volitmore ever found out about these negative feeling ,especilly for Albus, he could use them to mianipulate Harry to do somthing that would have horrible consequences for the light side! I am glad see see that Harry is continuing to use the Room of Requierment and the equipment that is provides in comming exercises to help calm his anger, if he were to accidently hurt someone because of a power surge resulting from anger, he would be devistaed and ,as we've seen in privious chapters thaat could cause him major phycological setbacks. Next I was very glad that Minerva made Albus see that they needed to take serious action were Sbape is concerned, It would be very entertaining to see Albus' discussion with Snape. I just hope that its enough to curb his bulllying behavior. Lastly I really hope that Albus improves in his efforts to heal his relationship with Harry and stops making poor decisions in regards to him. I have never like it when Albus is painted as cruel and manipulative, though I can certainly understand why Harry thinks he is. I just hope that Albus can figure out a way to gain Harry's trust while keep his, Harry's innocents in take. I don't evny Albus' position because he has to be more forthconing about infirmation regarding Harry's past and the reason for his decissions regarding Harry. The problerm is that everything comes back to the
prophecy, and Harry will not be able to deal with its contance at the moment. I just don't how Albus will gain Harry's trust. How does he impress upon the boy that he has, truly always has his, Harrys' best intrest at heart.., that will take some convincing. I just really hope things get better for the two of them because it hurts to see that they aren't close, as they were in the series, even if its to be expected. Update soon!
Untill next time,
Genna

Author's Response: Hi Genna, Welcome officially to SIYE and to the story. Thank you for leaving such a long, detailed review.

The story came from a discussion of what if Harry had turned out this way, instead of the path JKR chose. The rest of the story follows on that premise, so as you point out, it really does vary from canon in some significant ways.

Thankfully, Albus and Minerva made the decision to move Harry to the Weasleys'. There he saw how a real family functions, and he had a chance to become close with Arthur, Ginny and McGonagall.

The story is from Harry's point of view, so DD's portrayal is colored by Harry's feelings about him. Minerva probably understands the situation best, and she took her strongest actions with Albus in this chapter.

Since there is such a focus on the impact of Harry's childhood, I wanted to bring Lupin in as the DADA teacher. He will serve many purposes in the story that Quirrel would not have been able to, so it was an easy switch. Malfoy is a git, so it is fun to concoct ways to have him get points taken away. Something tells me he won't learn from his mistakes. Harry is pushing himself because Mr Weasley thought it was a good idea. Hannah's crush was an unexpected result of Harry just being nice. We'll see what happens in the next chapter.
br>Snape will have a chance to redeem himself. Whether he is capable or not is an entirely different question. As for Albus, Harry has centralized his feelings about men, authority figures, what's happened in his life in Albus. Both Harry and Albus need to find some common ground, so they can develop trust in each other. As for the prophecy, Albus can present information to the extent that Harry can understand and tolerate it from an emotional and psychological standpoint.

Again, thanks for signing up, and I look forward to receiving more comments from you. -- Jim



Reviewer: Leonheart666 Signed Date: 2008.06.14 - 05:02AM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Ok, so not only is Snape showing his usual tendencies which is bound to not help Harry, Lupin hasn't helped much, Dumbledore is still an idiot, and Harry's got about 50 million girls after him.

This isn't going to end well!

Good chapter, as usual of course.

Keep Up The Good Work!

Author's Response: Hi Tim, Change comes slowly in the wizarding world. We'll see if these three wizards are capable of doing what needs to be done. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. -- Jim



Reviewer: redheaded_brat Signed Date: 2008.06.13 - 10:30PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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Another great chapter!

And I love Minerva pointing out the statement of Choosing between what is right and what is easy!

Looking forward to the next chapter. And I'm still debating on that special redheaded hex for a certain Headmaster who desperately deserves it!

Author's Response: Hi RHBrat, Thank you! You've got me grinning now, just like when I had Minerva say one of canon Albus' most famous quotes. As for the hex, we know you want to cast it! Don't hold back. -- Jim



Reviewer: tear_away Signed Date: 2008.06.13 - 06:59PM Title: Known, Unknown, and Clueless

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