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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed
Date: 2016.01.12 - 06:25PM
Title: Fight
Well I suppose it makes sense that they are all a bit of a mess really.
Reviewer: Blissful Oblivion Signed
Date: 2012.05.15 - 07:43AM
Title: Fight
Wow, that was an intense chapter! At first I thought Ron was being a major prat but he reacted irrationally because he was under pressure with the whole George situation. The comments about Ginny and Neville were still unnecessary. Poor Harry got hit by three spells at the same time - he really should know better than to stand between Ron and Ginny when they're having such a major row. The conversation between Ron and Ginny was quite sweet when they were making up and hugging Harry and Ginny at the end was a nice gesture.
Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed
Date: 2010.02.17 - 12:34PM
Title: Fight
Poor Ron--he's trying to shoulder too big a burden. Hermione's okay, Ginny's got Harry, he can focus on the shop and George.
Reviewer: pottermania Signed
Date: 2010.01.31 - 12:32PM
Title: Fight
And what did Mrs Weasley tell Harry at Platform 93/4..."Stay out of trouble!". He certainly hasn't managed that!
Reviewer: santafe Signed
Date: 2010.01.20 - 06:29PM
Title: Fight
Great chapter. I'm glad you brought in the explanation for Ron's feelings. I think it came across quite well. Thanks. SF
Reviewer: kash2110 Signed
Date: 2008.10.19 - 08:55PM
Title: Fight
The talk between Ron & Ginny was touching. I can see why Ron's so upset with her though, he really has grown up in the last year. You written Molly's reacton perfectly, Mothers do have a tendency to...pretend nothings really wrong, because I think they really don't wish to admit the problem themselves. And George drinking is a dangerous problem. Too many people think it's easy to stop drinking but if you do it constantly it's very hard!!!
Author's Response: George will indeed discover that ... poor George ... *sob* One would hope Ron grew up ... I like to think he totally did ...
Reviewer: hawkeye2008 Signed
Date: 2008.09.15 - 10:15PM
Title: Fight
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Reviewer: gryff_princess Signed
Date: 2008.08.14 - 03:30AM
Title: Fight
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Reviewer: Yolis7 Signed
Date: 2008.04.02 - 10:55PM
Title: Fight
I love this Chapter..it was really good..keep up the great JOb...
Author's Response: Thank you, I will try :D
Reviewer: Kismatt Signed
Date: 2008.03.31 - 05:30PM
Title: Fight
LOL Okay let's try this again (apparently I have a itchy trigger finger)
I have enjoyed the story so far - I loved the 'breakdown' at Uluru - and only someone who lives in Australia could have captured the details of the trip on the Roobus! The fact that JKR sent the Grangers to Australia had to have been a wonderful opportunity for location based plots!
I know that you have not done creative writing for a while (besides for university classes *cough*) but I have noticed that the chapters are smoothing out, as you become more comfortable writing Harry, Ginny, Ron and Hermione's 'between' story.
I am really looking forward to more of the story - and I promise I'll review more as you post! :)
Author's Response: ROFLOL
I couldn't resist sending them to Australia. It's highly improbable but I just couldn't resist :D . When i sat in a specially made starscape dome made by one of teh universities in my hometown and the lecturer revolved the special thingy that pretends it is really the stars and used his laser pointer to say "Yes, it's all upside down, Orion, the star signs and here's Sirius, coming up on the horizon ... upside down dead dog Sirius" this plot line started forming in my head ...
I think my betas helped smooth it out too lol. The first ... um oh I dunno 15-17 chapters or something are untirely unbeta'ed. *forgets when parakletos joined her and made her do things properly* I have done no creative writing at uni - but this creative writing exercise has definitely made my academic writing stringer! Go figure! eg. 2000 word essays and reports don't scare me, I can write 14 000 word chapters! 2000 words is nothing! Perhaps I can do that thesis after all! *ponders doing Honours* Seriously I proof read better and have better vocab choices in my academic writing as a result as well. Anyhoo, lookng forard to more ... me too! :P Thanks for feedbacking! You read fast!
Reviewer: Kismatt Signed
Date: 2008.03.31 - 05:00PM
Title: Fight
Yay! Review!
Reviewer: annep Signed
Date: 2008.03.30 - 09:36PM
Title: Fight
Still not sure what to think of Professor Crockwell. She showed two sides last chapter, then there's the terrific scene in Muggle Studies class this chapter. Harry never provided his name, though she finally addressed him as Mr. Potter—did she know all along or recognized him only after putting on her glasses? Anyway, she’s intriguing and I’m looking forward to seeing where you’re going with her.
I noticed that lots of people commented on the wonderful sibling interactions in this chapter and I agree that both the fight and reconciliation scenes were fantastic. But no one mentioned the character whose words and actions really moved me—Minerva McGonagall. She's been no-nonsense about the rule-breaking yet also so compassionate towards these young adults who have recently gone through so much. The exchange between her and Harry about Heads and portraits was perfect.
You continue to do a great job of exploring the psychological impacts of the war on these students. My two favorite bits on this topic from this chapter were:
Luna said “You really do need to stay conscious, I think. It scares people when you lay limp and unmoving on the floor.”
“Between the three of you, I think you nearly accomplished something Voldemort never could manage.” Harry laughed as he pushed open the door to the greenhouse but he was the only one. The rest of the greenhouse fell silent and Hermione went pale.
Your ability to weave together humor and pathos is incredible. Thanks for yet another fantastic chapter.
Author's Response: Crockwell, ah, dear Ethel ... she only recognised him after she found her glasses lol. I won't spoile anything seeing as you are looking forward to her ... development! As for McGonagall, I thought it was about time Harry got a teacher or two on his side! (He might need them ;) ) I am glad you have enjoyed the weaving - it's usually quite deliberate!
Reviewer: emeraldflame91 Signed
Date: 2008.03.27 - 02:41PM
Title: Fight
Hey, it's been a LONG time since I've reviewed. -hits self over the head- I don't know if you remember me, but if not, I'm Eve, and I love your work! I've been really busy the past few months but I've found some time to catch up and read all of the chapters the I missed over the course of my spring break this week. I really love the direction this story is going in. It's just absolutely perfect. It's fluffy and has cute and sweet moments paired with a deep emotional core in all of your characters' portrayals. You, m'dear, are made of utter amazing and so is your writing! I still can't get over how mind-blowing and deep the last chapter was as well the chapter where Ginny had an emotional breakdown of sorts in her room. And then her heart to heart with Ron. I just... Guh.... I don't even know what to say. You explore Harry and Ginny and their thoughts and feelings and even their demons with such depth. How about I just say that I love you and that's just the end of it?! ;)
Other things, well Gilbert is a cutie, Harry's always such a sweetie - with Ginny - and just in general, and I enjoyed the interaction between Harry and Dean on the platform. (I'm sure Dean and Harry were on good terms after the war. I doubt there was any hard feelings.) Oh and I'd quite like to clock Gerald over the head! LOL. J/K. But is he ever going to lighten up?
I'm looking forward to the next chapter!! Keep up the brilliance! =D
(10/10 fo sho! =) By the way.)
Author's Response: I know how teh busy goes! I recently went back to univeristy for the year so updates may slow ... we shall all have to live with the pain *sigh* I have been having a ball exploring all the depths and whatnot and I love when people 'get it' you know? I think you also are wonderful! *mwah*
I think Harry and Dean actually have a deeper connecton now than they used to, before DH. I guess I wanted to show that Dean isn't just some ex boyfriend of Ginny's. He's always been a friend in his own right and I think he will continue to be. And poor Dean, poor ol' Dean. oh whoops that might be a spoiler for chapter 29 ... *looks innocent* Ah grasshopper, there is more to Gerald than meets the eye ;) Everyone wants to clock the poor kid ... just wait ... :D
Reviewer: charlz1983 Signed
Date: 2008.03.23 - 01:29PM
Title: Fight
ron needs to go back to hogwarts!!!!!! he is missing it!!!! nice heart to heart tho!!!
Author's Response: Ron is actually much more useful 'on the outside' ... :D
Reviewer: harrypotterspirit Signed
Date: 2008.03.20 - 08:24PM
Title: Fight
You brought out Ron's brotherly love with Ron/Ginny's conversation. Most of the time the Weasleys probably use humor as a tool for emotional release but with Freds death you used a much needed heart to heart talk. As anyone who has dealt with death in the family knows; close contact while revisiting family memories is very healthy and comforting. Nicely done. This chapter many nice touches which keeps me coming back to this story.
Author's Response: I believe that Ron feels deeply for his family and death is rarely dealt with well by humour. Hopefully young Ron's back on somewhat of an even keel now. I'm glad you keep coming back.
Reviewer: Laurendcg05 Signed
Date: 2008.03.20 - 07:32PM
Title: Fight
Poor Harry, but at least his day got better! And at least everything is now out in the open and everyone can move on slowly but surely. That was a wonderful sibling conversation, though I don't think I would ever be that open with a brother, I'm glad that they could. Anyway, great chapter, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try! Glad you liked it!
Reviewer: GryffindorGal87 Signed
Date: 2008.03.20 - 12:22PM
Title: Fight
I'm glad Ron and Ginny got everything worked out. And I'm also really glad Harry fixed the Muggle Studies class. What was that woman thinking? That was another great chapter as usual and I can't wait for the next one! =]
Author's Response: Why thank you! Don't be too hard on dear Ethel ... hearts in the right place ... ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: WickedLoz Signed
Date: 2008.03.20 - 02:31AM
Title: Fight
I LOVE RON! xD
And - ZOMG! - He is actually CANON! I hate those fanfics where he is stupid and overprotective and just eats and grunts.. Ugh!
The Ron and Ginny interaction was lovely.. It reminds me a lot of my sister and me having heart to hearts about our crazy hopeless family.. Even the fight was awesome!
“Brilliant!”
“What’s brilliant exactly?” Ron was standing in the middle of the Entrance Hall, his arms crossed over his chest, scowling at his sister.
“Well, not you, obviously,” Ginny retorted.
“You are then, are you?”
“Yes, as a matter of fact I am,” said Ginny, staring at her brother defiantly.
Haha.. Sibling love.
Oh OH and the Hermione/Malfoy interaction!! I seriously couldn't stop laughing about that!! Poor Draco was so lost..
And I'm glad there's no sexing.. yet :)
Author's Response: Ron seriously rules ... and Draco - you gotta laugh. Poor sod I don't think he knows quite what to do!
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed
Date: 2008.03.19 - 06:52PM
Title: Fight
well its about time they talk and ron really needs to think before he leeps...but then again whatr he has been goiung thought its understandable to a point....kutgw
Author's Response: I think they sorted a few things out - yes? Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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