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Reviewer: BobVosh Signed Date: 2013.09.05 - 12:26AM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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I stopped reading on this chapter. There are a multitude of reasons why I didn't like this story.

Harry returns, no explanation of why he is gone. He is dismissive and rude about the previous relationship. He has no respect for her personal space, reading her mind. He never once bothered, in a decade, to contact her. The love letter also had nothing but physical characteristics, which isn't exactly good for a relationship. Which explains a lot.

Ginny immediately cheats on her husband, with someone whom did all the above. She lied to her husband for years, frankly using him for jerkass reasons. Within 10 minutes practically she cheats on him, that still is astonishing. The person she cheats on her husband with acts nothing like the person she used to like, and everything seems to just be pure lust. Then she immediately stops taking the contraception potion, which is even more of a bitch move.

At no point did you make this look like anything but a physical relationship, making both characters appear shallow.

Also Theo is a good guy and really didn't deserve this.

On a technical aspect the writing is pretty good. A few run ons, but nothing terrible. So that part is great, especially for FF.



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2012.10.09 - 01:51PM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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Again, more OOC. It seems impossible that the characters from the book would carry on like these do. The idea of canon Harry having an affair with a married woman, even if it was Ginny, just doesn't seem possible. The quick reconciliation after the seeming anger Ginny had for Harry seems quite unlikely, too.



Reviewer: eaglebird Signed Date: 2007.04.18 - 06:05PM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

One more comment on standards.

Can anyone who reads Checkmated, SimplyUndeniable or PhoenixSong imagine this story being posted on any one of those sites?

I would like to think that SIYE would want to be perceived as being on the same level of standards as any one of those sites.



Reviewer: eaglebird Signed Date: 2007.04.18 - 05:57PM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

I apologize for the harshness in my first review of this chapter but not for the message. I have now finished reading this story and I still believe it could be significantly improved. To say this story deserves high merit, though, would be misleading because there are just too many holes with the characters and the plotline.

I am sure the author is a very nice person and some aspects of her writing style are very good. My intention was only to bring to light some major pitfalls in her story that needed dramatic highlighting. The story was already finished and the author did not address any of the prior criticisms in her story from either here at SIYE or at FF.net before posting subsequent chapters here at SIYE.

Since there is no forum at SIYE and the question of standards was recently an issue with PORNOGRAPHY, then I see no reason at all why I can't use this story as a test case to challenge those standards. For how else are the administrators at SIYE or the auhors ever going to know. This is not flaming, it is just dealing with reality. It is also stepping over the conventional "line", but if I start reading a whole bunch more of "low standard" H/G stories such as I find at FF.net and GinnyPotter.com, then I will become more vocal and say so. I read a lot of stories here and overall the quality is very high. Betas are used frequently and their input is felt and seen. Should any story be allowed to be posted at SIYE without some prior review? I believe I was questioning if this story was approved, and if it was, then I think that the approving SIYE admin's "set of standards" needs to be challenged and I still feel that this story could be used as a test case.

I remember recently following The Prodigal Daughter with great interest. Finally, I think it was Ch.10, the story got a bit too steamy and the admins pulled it. That was a really good fanfc. Why didn't someone pull this story?



Reviewer: gryffindor lioness Signed Date: 2007.04.18 - 01:54PM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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hey i must agree with Darian 100%. some people can be down right harsh and not accept the courage it can take someone to put forward a piece of work and can't deal with the simple "ok i don't like your story 100%- you could do this, this and this and it might be better but keep going"dude really whats wrong with that review?!
well done on sticking to you story.



Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2007.04.18 - 04:05AM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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Wow, that was a bit harsh. If a readrer doesn't like a story, there's always the delete button. Evidently, SIYE disagree, because the story IS here. I admit there are times it's a bit chopy, but there's a lot to suss out, and more chapters to do it in.
OWLS? okay, Hedwig died and Harry got another...SO? Lily got an owl, presumably to be able to owl Dora.
I also admit that there are some stories on this site I HATE...but I don't slam the write or the story (with the exception of Pornography)...I just delete it and have done with it.
Thanks for not caving in because of one review.

Darian



Reviewer: eaglebird Signed Date: 2007.04.14 - 06:13PM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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This chapter is just too incredible to believe. It utterly lacks credibility. What astounds me most is that your writing style flows so smoothly and it is a pleasure to read. I think that is why I have got this far. I have read too many fanfics at FF.net and HPFF written by 15 year olds and that is what this plot sounds like, but it is obviously written by an older writer. It is the content, facts, plot and logic that needs major work. For example, why waste our time with Theodorus at all. He is just an annoyance, to Ginny, and to us the reader. He has been there for 10 years, but fulfills no useful purpose in the plot. He is a good father but a mediocre lover, he provides food and shelter but no distinctive skills or personality and he just gives up when he discover his wife in bed with another man and immediately grants a dissolution. I am also disappointed that Ginny, a happily married mother with a 10 year old all of a sudden risks her reputation in wizard society by haing an affair. So what if it is Harry Potter. There were other solutions she and Harry could have done to protect her reputation and schieve the same objective. You have sullied Ginny's character by having her and Harry carry out this affair. On a reaaly trivial note why did you spend so many words on owls. Harry loses Hedwig and gets a new owl. Lily gets a new owl. Was there any purpose for this? I would like to know who approved this story to be placed on SIYE? in my opinion it rates as a stort that perhaps should have been sent back for major re-write before being put up on this site. And that would go towards setting a standard. I'm sorry, but I believe this story is way below standard and the only reason I am writing all these comments is that I see the potential for you to be a top notch writer.



Reviewer: carolquin Signed Date: 2007.04.14 - 05:39AM Title: Chapter 3 - Affair

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