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Reviewer: murdrax Signed Date: 2009.01.20 - 08:28PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
hmm very interesting story you got going here im very curious to see what happens next!!
Reviewer: Taku Signed Date: 2008.12.04 - 09:45AM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
Now you have written yourself some super Harry (though as advisor only), It will be interesting to see if you are able to write your own story or if you just write a slightly modified version of the books. I hope for the first, but more than once I seen the second for this kind of story.
So far this has been some kind of an over long prologue.
Reviewer: CodeRomance Signed Date: 2008.12.01 - 07:48PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
aww rats! now i have to wait! this sucks brilliant chapter! grr! i can't wait to read more! anyway update soon PLEASE! ASAP!!
CodeRomance
Reviewer: Kage James Signed Date: 2008.12.01 - 06:34PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
quotation: [So those were my grandparents? Cool.]
This response seems forced. Harry meets people he thinks are his grandparents for the first time and what comes to his mind is cool? This just seems awkward to me.
quotation: [“So certain are you? Very well. The questions you must answer are:
“First... Second... Third... Fourth... Fifth... Sixth and last, give me one good reason why I should let you pass my test.”]
I have no problem with the questions themselves or the fact that you numbered them the way you did. I found this numbering of the question logic. However, having the 'man' say all the questions at once without giving Harry a chance to answer in between seem illogical. How would Harry remember all the question with the amount of stress he (must likely) was feeling? Is it reasonable to expect anyone to remember all those questions? (Yes, I am aware there are only six, but I know I would not be able to remember all the question and an answer to them in the best of situations. This is not a situation I would call great.)
The conversation between the Harry and the first 'man' seemed forced aswell, however it wasn't that distracting.
Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2008.12.01 - 12:28AM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
This is getting good.........
look forward to next update......
Reviewer: Professor_Chris Signed Date: 2008.11.30 - 11:04PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
Very good chapter... Wow that was quite some test that Harry had to face, I am glad that he was able to make it through and obviously learned a lot too.
Reviewer: Lady Squish Signed Date: 2008.11.30 - 09:13PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
Wow! This is a really great story. I can't believe that I've never heard of it before. I can't wait to see what's coming next. Hope to see the next chapter soon. Good luck.
Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2008.11.30 - 05:39PM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
This wasn't what I expected, but it was very interesting and unique. I look forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: lety77 Signed Date: 2008.11.30 - 09:16AM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
Harry's tests appear to have taken months if not years to pass. He finally reaches his destination in the past, but has also grown past his sixteen year old self and into a mature adult. Time travel Harry will hopefully help Young Harry to become who he needs to be in order to acheive his goals.
I was delighted to see your newest chapter to this really great story. I started from chapter one and continued to the end of chapter six. I'm looking foward to the rest of the story and your next chapter.
Reviewer: Kitaro Signed Date: 2008.11.30 - 08:39AM Title: Chapter 5: What Comes After…?
a good time travel story ... i cant w8 fr ur next post ....
