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Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2020.04.05 - 02:26PM Title: Silence Shattered
Something tells me Ginny maybe going to Hogwarts a year early....kutgw
Reviewer: Arturus Signed Date: 2018.12.04 - 03:10AM Title: Silence Shattered
One of my favourite stories on this site.
Reviewer: nayin1704 Signed Date: 2017.01.07 - 10:59PM Title: Silence Shattered
You're Ginny is one of the best that I've read
Reviewer: Hippothestrowl Signed Date: 2013.06.27 - 09:38AM Title: Silence Shattered
Very well written and extremely readable. It feels as if it over-glorifies Ginny, especially when she meets Harry, but what the hell, eh? Must be density.
The chapter might have mentioned her relationship to Ron more though, because he is much closer in age and she would have spent the last two years with mostly only his company. I think she might miss him most when he left for Hogwarts. However, there is no indication of sharing each other's company much when she joins him a year later so what do I know?
Harry is well-painted and closer to my own 'Chary' fic character: withdrawn with suppressed feelings. It will be very interesting to see how this story progresses.
Reviewer: Hawk29 Signed Date: 2013.03.20 - 09:45PM Title: Silence Shattered
This is my second time reading through Meaning of One, though you're further into the second story than you were when I last read it, and it was long ago, so I don't remember the specifics of your story. I remember reading this chapter, though. This introduction to Harry and Ginny before the events of the books is one of the best chapters I've ever read in fan fiction, and undoubtedly one of the reasons many people who start your stories stick around and come to love them. With this chapter, you've managed to take the common characters we all know from the stories, describe them the way others see them in great detail, and then go into their point-of-view and really explain what makes them *tick*. It's really well done and well written, and has recaptured my attention.
I look forward to reading through your story again, and hope you decide to continue the Meaning of One series.
Reviewer: Kallandra Signed Date: 2012.12.29 - 10:02PM Title: Silence Shattered
I love your writing style, it reminds me of Patrick Rothfuss's, wonderfully different and full of brilliant descriptions. Every description gives the thing a life of its own.
Reviewer: Kallandra Signed Date: 2012.12.29 - 08:19AM Title: Silence Shattered
I love your writing style, it reminds me of Patrick Rothfuss's, wonderfully quirky and full of brilliant descriptions.
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2012.09.25 - 07:50PM Title: Silence Shattered
This is crazy that this -- possibly the best story on SIYE -- doesn't have 1000 reviews yet.
My effort in the cause.
Reviewer: sunnyseaforever Signed Date: 2012.05.18 - 01:26AM Title: Silence Shattered
I liked how you introduced Harry and Ginny's character and how their lives had been like. They seem to be each others perfect half. Where one lacks in, the other had in abundance.
Your description of Ginny's hair was great. Her presence was so strong, whereas Harry's was barely there.
The last line was great - 'Harry’s world exploded, and reality twitched.'
Reviewer: Inspirement Signed Date: 2011.11.16 - 12:16AM Title: Silence Shattered
I love how you sometimes stray away from the kind of prose one usually sees in fanfiction into the realm of something more akin to poetry. Take this line for example:
"Her brothers could easily be said to have hair the color of flames. If that were the case, then Ginny’s hair was the color of what fire endlessly strives and fails to become."
I thoroughly anticipate reading the rest of your story.
Also, I loved the prologue. I think I got the gist of what was going on at least.
Reviewer: BrutallyHonest Signed Date: 2010.01.11 - 11:03PM Title: Silence Shattered
woot woot! finally! lol
Author's Response: Aw, come on. It didn't take that long, did it? =)
Reviewer: juice14 Signed Date: 2009.08.13 - 11:48PM Title: Silence Shattered
Wow, that's a good last line! Someone should put that into a challenge hehe
Author's Response: A challenge to find new and different ways for reality to twitch? That could be fun.
Reviewer: Dragon Warrior Signed Date: 2009.07.17 - 03:18PM Title: Silence Shattered
this is very interesting. you are one of my favorite authors along with intomit and bengpotter32
Author's Response: Thanks very much, and thanks for reading.
Reviewer: colpinky Signed Date: 2009.03.13 - 02:48PM Title: Silence Shattered
I don't think I said this the first time I read this story, but the last line of this chapter is great.
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I thought for a long time about exactly how to phrase that line.
Reviewer: Monty Signed Date: 2008.11.28 - 08:25PM Title: Silence Shattered
Well my eyes are drooping and I'm afraid I'm giving in to one of our most basic needs; but I said I would ;]
I hate that my first comment is negative and its not really my right to intrude on your wonderful story, but 'bangs' is probably the most American word I've ever come across! But hey, details...
I really enjoyed this chapter too :) I'm glad your writng style has't changed! Even though the content is slightly less meta-physical than before. A couple of things I really loved:
"pictorial parade of deceased felines" is a brilliant description of the Ms. Figg visits, sums them up perfectly :)
The description of Ginny is beautiful, very very nicely done. Its interesting how incredibly dreary Harry is in comparison - you're making them out to be much more extreme than canon but this follows from the prologue, and you can pick out the Ps in the descriptions.
Lastly the ending was great! Such a small reaction from big ole reality, for such a momentous personal event. Nicely contrasted.
First chapter didn't dissapoint :) H&G are slightly more moulded into the Ps than I expected, but hey, your story - your characters, and I'm looking forward to joining them on the next step of their journey when I can keep my eyes open a bit longer.
Goonight!
Monty
Author's Response: Oh, gracious. I had no idea that 'bangs' was still in this chapter on SIYE. I've updated it in my archive copy and on other sites, but somehow I missed this one. How embarrassing.
You're one of very few people thus far who've picked up on the contrasts in this chapter. Ginny v. Harry, in terms of their 'vividness,' is a very sharp and very meaningful contrast. And the contrast between the scale of events (for people vs. for reality) is a big underlying theme of the series. I really am quite pleased to hear from someone who sees that.
They are moulded into the Ps, but that's the first part of another big contrast, which hopefully will be (or was) clear in upcoming chapters.
Thanks very much for reading and leaving such excellent reviews.
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2008.10.31 - 12:13AM Title: Silence Shattered
This is when I was hooked on the story!
Author's Response: That's good to hear. In some ways, this is my favorite chapter.
Reviewer: jediprankster Signed Date: 2008.07.22 - 01:11AM Title: Silence Shattered
Excellent! I loved the entire paragraph describing Ginny's hair, but the last line ("If that were the case, then Ginny’s hair was the color of what fire endlessly strives and fails to become.") was perfect.
I also liked the last line in the chapter. ("Harry’s world exploded, and reality twitched.") How long did you search for the right word to convey the desired feeling before you settled on twitched? It was the perfect choice.
Author's Response: Some people really like 'twitched', and some people don't. I did spend some time deciding on the right word, but once it occurred to me I knew it was right. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Pooky Anonymous Date: 2008.02.24 - 05:03PM Title: Silence Shattered
I have skimmed through various parts of this story before, but I have never throughly read it and I have never left a review in it before. I attend to change that shortly.
I absolutely loved your description of Ginny. This is the way I always envision Ginny being (in terms of her personality, though I always see her as being more powerful magically--I understand why she is not in your story, however--the whole becoming one thing.) I especially loved the way that you described her hair, and I think that it is indeed a fitting symbol of her personality and inner spirit (In fact I was going to ask your permission to use some of those words in my own story that I am about to start writing!) You know reading about Molly Weasley's concern for her daughter's lack of magical power brings up two very interesting points for the Harry Potter Universe at large. The first point is that the Wizarding World is so bloody dependent on MAGIC!!! It appears that the attitude of most people in the magical world is that unless something is magical in some way it is unworthy of real attention at best, and worthy of loathing and hatred at worst. It is sad really that it appears that if something can't be done with magic, then most people don't even concern themselves with doing it or looking to the Muggle World for a solution. That might be one of the reasons that the Wizarding World is so woefully inadequate and underdeveloped in many areas, including technology, the arts (we only hear about a few musical people and only the magical potraits), and sports (Quidditch appears to be the only sport ever talked about, and it is sad that their are not more athletic opportunities available for those who can't/don't play that game.) It amazes me that the immediate thought of Molly is that Ginny will never be able to find something, or find life difficult in the Wizarding World because of her lack of magic potential. They are many things/vocations/opportunities for Ginny that exist if her horizons are not limited to the rather limited opportunities of the Wizarding World and are aloud to be open to the Muggle world(seriously in the Harry Potter universe the only real careers we are ever shown are Aurors, Healers, teachers, Quidditch players, curse-breakers, dragon-tamers, and government officials.)
The second point is that the Wizarding World (consciously for some, unconsciously for others) appears to judge the intrinsic value of a person based on their magical potential or family status. While I know that similiar measuring sticks are used in the Muggle World, the Wizarding World as a whole appears to be deely entrenched in this mindset. Hence, for example, the prejudice against Squibs or other sentient magical beings. It is sad (in both the Wizarding and Muggle Worlds) that people are valued because what they can do, accomplish, achieve instead of simply for the point that they exist at all. I think Ginny, however, falls out of that category. I say that because of the emphasis she puts on remembering and caring for the boy Harry Potter, instead of the Boy-Who-Lived. Ginny, in the understanding of a nine-year old, sees past all the garbage that most Wizarding adults buy into, and see is able to see both Harry and herself for who they truly are, and she values Harry and herself simply because they exist in the first place. Ginny is indeed wise beyond her years and it shows.
In some ways I don't like your characterization of Harry all that much, but I understand why he is portrayed the way he is for the sake of your story (the whole becoming one theme!) I do like the point that a passion burns in Harry, an ambition to be more, to accomplish great things, to overcome the hardships that he has had to endure. I also love the characterizations of Harry and his "relationship" with anger. In many ways I think Harry's scar is a great symbol of who he is (as much as Ginny's hair is for her.) Harry is definately a scarred individual (far more than physically.) But the fact that he has a scar shows that he is a survivor and the fact that it is in the shape of a lightening blot, to me indicates something of the strength, power, and fury of Harry's inner spirit and resolve. I also think his green eyes serve as a powerful symbol of who he is. I like the symbolism of Ginny's magical aura being emerald-green a nice foreshadowing of her destiny in regards to Harry.
I loved their meeting in King's Cross and the phrase "reality twitched." I also liked Harry's comparison of Mrs. Weasley to Vernon, and that comparison definately holds truth given how Harry's relationship with Mrs. Weasley unfolds (at least now) in your universe. I do have a question, however, and I know that you will probably not answer it, but I will ask it anyway: In light of Harry and Ginny's becoming one, where does the fragment of Voldyshort's soul that was in canon Harry fit in??? Did MoO's Harry never have it in the first place? Does the soul bond throw it out of Harry??? Or is it still present there attempting to adjust to the new situation?? And if it is there, do or will Harry and/or Ginny ever become aware of its presence?? Can it influence Ginny and Harry?? Or does their union protect them from Tom's influence???
I look forward to reading and reviewing the other chapters in your saga! Keep up the great work with MoO2.
Chris (Pooky)
Author's Response: Here we go. These replies may come slowly, as I take time to respond with the thoughtfulness your reviews deserve. I do love the reviews, though - it's great to really dig into things.
That description of Ginny is completely accurate, and yet I sometimes wish I had spent more time on it. The point is what's not in Ginny's character, but I'm not sure I showed that well. In any case, you're welcome to borrow the description of her hair.
I think the dependence on magic is perhaps a flaw, but I think it's understandable, too. All-wizarding families, especialy old ones like the Weasleys, have no idea how Muggle things work, so they have to rely on magic. To them, the idea of learning how to live like a muggle is ludicrous, even if they know it's possible. It'd be rather like a normal person saying s/he wanted to go off and live like an Inca from the 1600s (ish).
That said, I do recognise what you're saying, and I agree. Molly is a product of her culture.
I'm glad you don't like Harry. You're not supposed to. In fact, he's not an especially good person at this point. He's not bad, he's just . . . there. Starting from this point, what might have become of him if he hadn't connected with Ginny? What might have become of her?
I'm definitely not going to answer the question about Voldemort's soul fragment, though if you look closely, the answer is already there in the two stories.
Thanks for taking the time to read closely and make all the right observations. I look forward to the next one.
Dave
Reviewer: ProfessorBinns Signed Date: 2007.12.13 - 04:54PM Title: Silence Shattered
I've been re-reading this while I wait for the next chapter of MoO 2, and I noticed a little error you might want to fix. In the account of the zoo incident, there's a line, "Uncle Vernon listened to Piers' accusations..." I believe that's the one and only time PIers is mentioned, and no information is given about who he is, his relation to Harry or Dudley, or his presence at the zoo.
I hope you understand that editing is the sincerest form of appreciation for a writer! I thoroughly enjoy your work and hope to see it continue. My comment is offered in response to your inspiring commitment to perfection in your work.
Thanks again!
Author's Response: That's an excellent point about Piers. I'll have to think about how to fix it, but I'll definitely do something. It shows how my writing style has solidified since then. That's a good thing, right?
I'm always open to criticism like that, or really anything provided it's not rude or purely inflammatory. I really appreciate your taking the time to draw my attention to that oversight.
Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Kage James Signed Date: 2007.12.05 - 01:11AM Title: Silence Shattered
"... Ginny’s hair was the color of what fire endlessly strives and fails to become"
the discription used to describe Ginny is just... briliant.
Author's Response: I'm rather proud of that line, actually. Thanks!
