SIYE Time:12:42 on 13th August 2022

Reviewer: mcepl Signed Date: 2017.11.27 - 03:12AM Title: Out with a Bang

Completely off the rails idea: I know you love invisible links between your stories. Of course, Jane Wake from Hunters and Prey is obviously Jacqui’s mom, but I cannot stop thinking about Jacqueline, dorm-mate of Ginny in the Hogwarts. When we are in the business of Obliviation, wouldn’t it be a neat way how to hide yourself in the Muggle world during the War? Or was it something so tragic as in the “Germ Free Adolescents”?

Author's Response: Alternatively, it could simply be me forgetting that I have two Jacquelines in my stories. Sometimes I re-use names subconsciously, sometimes I choose not to change them. Jacqui's husband is a good example. Michael (Mike) Charlton was well established before I realised I'd be adding Michael Corner to the plot. No one has commented about Mike/Michael, so why should there be a problem with Jacqueline/Jacqui. -N-

Reviewer: mcepl Signed Date: 2017.10.23 - 06:24PM Title: Out with a Bang

One more comment and it is not only to this chapter and not only to this work: it seems to me Hermione tends to slip you lately into almost 100% tiresome and insufferable bore. I am not (I hope) too much Hermione shipper (I a way prefer book Hermione/Ron to the movie ones), but she seemed to me a way more normal and even funny sometimes in Hunters and Prey or in Grave Days. Is it intentional or was she a bit forgotten and slipped out of your control?

Author's Response: I was aiming for a rather tense Hermione. I thought it was obvious that she's a little concerned about the Ginny/Jacqui friendship, and that she tries to keep any conversation on very Muggle grounds. -N-

Reviewer: ravenclaw_girl101 Signed Date: 2017.10.02 - 12:55AM Title: Out with a Bang


What a great chapter! It’s been a long long time since I started this fic. One day at work I remembered it and came looking for it and it didn’t disappoint, just like the first time I read it. Very lovely as always. Can’t wait for the next one.

Author's Response: Thanks. This story has been a long time in the telling, but it's finally approaching a finale. -N-

Reviewer: Lemonpomtart Signed Date: 2017.09.22 - 07:23AM Title: Out with a Bang


That cliff hanger! I'm excited for whats next!! ^-^

Author's Response: I'll try not to disappoint. -N-

Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2017.09.21 - 07:06AM Title: Out with a Bang

An interlude of boring paperwork?Have you gone completely bonkers?Oh Merlin! Now I have to drink a bottle of Merlot! Cannot wait. I will finally sleep considering you nearly gave me and poor Mike and Jacquie a heart attack. Trust Polly!

Author's Response: Now that I've said it, it does sound like I've gone bonkers, doesn't it. But then, my motto has always been "Let’s all just keep our fingers crossed and hope for the best." -N-

Reviewer: arwen85 Signed Date: 2017.09.21 - 07:00AM Title: Out with a Bang


Excellent chapter. Can't wait for the update!

Author's Response: I'm working on it. -N-

Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.09.21 - 05:20AM Title: Out with a Bang


Oh, goodness! You've left us with quite the cliffhanger. Definitely not a convenient time to have indulged in so much wine. Greatly looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: It's the last cliffhanger this this story will have, I had to make it a good one. -N-

Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.09.21 - 01:40AM Title: Out with a Bang


Well, well. We've been pottering along pleasantly, but slowly, and thanks to reading along with James and Me, I was wondering when something would happen to require obliviation of the Charltons, and how Jacqui would ferret out the knowledge of the Wizarding World. But, no, you had other ideas! "Out with a bang," indeed!!!

Author's Response: Pottering along with the Potters, indeed. Jacqui can (with Mike's help) rationalise the little things. The big ones however... -N-

Reviewer: rbrt_emmer Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 10:59PM Title: Out with a Bang


Oh no! A cliffhanger! I'm on pins and needles!

Author's Response: All will not be revealed in the next chapter, -N-

Reviewer: PhoenixFeather2 Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 09:20PM Title: Out with a Bang


Agh!!!! So much drama to end on! I am curious where you will go with this.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm heading toward to a conclusion in chapter 37. -N-

Reviewer: fi103r Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 09:19PM Title: Out with a Bang


hung on a cliff we are, again.
Keep up the good work
When are the Potters going to realize Jacqui is not per se a Muggle?
later, much later, I guess.

Author's Response:
Everyone likes a cliffhanger don't they?
I'll do my best.
That's a very good question.
And answer.

Reviewer: LizzieB Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 03:27PM Title: Out with a Bang

Thank you so much for such a charming and unexpected story. Love the characters! Annie is my favorite! It's too bad that in order to stay true to CANON, the Charltons have to be Obliviated.

Author's Response: You're welcome. I'm rather fond of them, too. There's a dalek-like chorus of "Obliviate" in these reviews. -N-

Reviewer: freshwater Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 03:26PM Title: Out with a Bang


EVIL cliffhanger! Please update quickly!

I suppose this will dovetail with events in your new story "James and Me"? Clever!

Author's Response:
I'll do my best, but even if I do, you won't be very happy.

Dovetail is perhaps too strong a word, I don't think I'm that clever.


Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 11:36AM Title: Out with a Bang


Now that's what I call an interesting chapter ending.

Author's Response: Jacqui lives in interesting times. :-D -N-

Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 09:19AM Title: Out with a Bang


Oh no! I think if Polly weren't dead, Harry would be ready to kill her about now. I had to laugh at Jacqui's thoughts on Hermione - I imagine she would be a bit intense and even a bit scary. Ron and Mike seem like they would be great friends - they have a similar corny sense of humor and they are bascially both giant kids who would make great dads! Can't wait to see what will happen next! I see Obliviators in the future!

Author's Response: He certainly would. I've always seen Hermione as intense, and I hope that I've shown that, behind the facade she presents to the world, Jacqui is rather insecure. As for Mike, I think he is a lot like Ron, but finds Harry a little intimidating, More soon, -N-

Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 08:55AM Title: Out with a Bang


Outstanding. The bes t. Ever. Love it. My heart is still raising. Oho... so this is the time when theobliviators must have intervened. Oh Merlin! Cannot wait fo James and Me when all these will have to be explained!

Author's Response: Thank you. Everyone is expecting the Obliviators, aren't they? -N-

Reviewer: mcepl Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 05:25AM Title: Out with a Bang


Great chapter! Of course, I am looking forward to the next one, but I know, these chapters are not writing themselves.

I thought it was a bit uneven chapter, too thin in the beginning and too thick in the end. But I like a bit drunk Jacqui (I was remembering one time in Italy when a waiter asked whether I want one or two of wine; fortunately, I said one (because my wife couldn't drink) and I meant glass, and he meant bottle :( The wine was so good I drunk it all, but I couldn't drive next day; yes, I should work on improving my relationship with alcohol, I know).


Author's Response:
The next one is about 90% complete, but I believe that the ninety-ninety rule applies to writing: The first 90% percent of the chapter accounts for the first 90% percent of writing. The remaining 10% of the chapter accounts for the other 90% of the writing time.

Interesting observation. I see it differently. I may be wrong, of course. I think I needed the weather for the raincoats, and the raincoats for the pub. The swimming was needed for Jacqui's stress levels, because I wanted her to drink too much.


Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 02:15AM Title: Out with a Bang

Good thing Jacqui had mike behind her. Now the reversal squad is going to have there hands for the kids they did get up to something big in th play area but what was for the teen and Ron his heart was in the right place but Hermione will never see it that way...kutgw

Author's Response: You're right about the kids, dammit, I thought no one had spotted that. Ron was trying to help, in a very Ron sort of way. -N-

Reviewer: HPmum2014 Signed Date: 2017.09.20 - 02:04AM Title: Out with a Bang


Is this when the Obliviations start for the Charlton family? Good chapter, hoping for an update on James and Me too, if possible xx

Author's Response: Obliviations? Jacqui has never been Obliviated at least, she can't remember ever having been Obliviated. :-) James & Me 14: Mysterious Stranger is at about 3000 words, and Strangers 35: Interlude: Paperwork is at about 5000. I'm honestly not sure which one will be ready next. -N-

Reviewer: potternut190 Signed Date: 2017.09.19 - 10:31PM Title: Out with a Bang


And here I was just today thinking it would be nice to read a new chapter from Northumbrian. Thank you for another great chapter. A ghost and a mess of blue lights to end it. What a cliffhanger! Will there be obliviation in the Charleton's future?

Author's Response: Thanks, and I'm glad you liked it. There was a little more than a ghost and a mess of blue lights. As for an Obliviation, wait and see. -N-

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