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Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2017.12.10 - 10:53AM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

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Interesting retelling of the OotP pre-crisis action.

The base strength of your story is its novel perspective -- basically sticking to 90-95% canonical plot, but through a very different set of eyes and ears and a somewhat distinct set of issues. This can be a great recipe for experiencing everything anew, but only as long as the authour is disciplined enough to stick to the unique perspective -- not always easy given the tempting crystal ball of canonical foreknowledge...

But you're definitely pulling it off. Good job!



Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely review! As time goes on in this story, I will be following canon less which is both exciting and frightening!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.10.12 - 05:26AM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

Yikes, I'd completely overlooked that I'd already left a review for this chapter, lol. It must have something to do with my advanced age...
On the other hand, it prettifies the statistics, doesn't it?

Author's Response: It's all good! I simply thought you had further questions/ comments. Thank you!!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.10.12 - 04:36AM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

It's a pity that Ginny didn't kick his shin, when Harry reacted so grumpily on her offer to help.

I'm afraid that Malfoy is up to no good. Or is it just a ruse from the author, so that Anna can't join the others on their way to the Ministry? We will see. On the other hand, maybe Harry won't go to the Ministry at all, and Sirius will stay alive. We will see, indeed.

Author's Response: Ginny kicking Harry would have been rather amusing I must admit! He was being a bit of a prat. The next two chapters will answer your questions. Thank you!!!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.10.10 - 03:56PM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

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Cheers for another interesting chapter! Dorko sure never hesitates to show what a total jerk he is! Good for Harry on his magic improvement - must really be good if he impressed Ol Greasehead! Interesting about Harry and Anna's lessons and her being an Occlumens. Hermoine needs to give it a rest - not everyone is an academic ace! Hope you work in Charlie to rescue Anna soon (Charlie was also the only Weasley not to appear in the movies) ! I swear Umbitch makes you wish that when the Centaurs took her into the forest(my favorite scene in OTP) that they hadn't brought her back! Can't wait for the next one!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I have to tell you I was thoroughly disappointed that Albus went into the forest and "rescued" Dolores at the end of Book 5 thus enabling her to continue to rise in the Ministry and lead the Muggle-born Registration movement in Book 7. Sometimes Dumbledore made seriously poor choices in his quest to always give everyone a second chance! Charlie will show up again soon, though we have to make it through some other things before he returns. Personally, I don't know why Charlie was left out of the movies. It would have been perfectly easy to include him in the Goblet of Fire movie!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.10.09 - 04:32AM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

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I can't help but hope Malfoy is trying to do something indecent to Anna, to give her the opportunity to hex him into the next century, without a return ticket.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I take it you are not a fan of Draco Malfoy. I read a story once where he was transfigured into manure and scourgified out of existence. Wish I could remember the name of the fic; that author had quite the imagination!



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2017.10.08 - 10:37AM Title: Chapter 11 O.W.L.s

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Good chapter, but where's my Charlie??? If Anna decides she doesn't want to marry him I will gladly...feel free to send him my way! :)

Author's Response: Love this comment!!! I'm glad you approve of Charlie, and I promise he will return to the story soon. It's good to know I'm not the only one intrigued by his character (the only Weasley brother JKR never told us much about). Thank you for reviewing and for making me laugh!




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