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Reviewer: riegert8 Signed
Date: 2011.08.31 - 05:11PM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
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Reviewer: pottermania Signed
Date: 2009.12.21 - 05:38PM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
I've picked up on one or two comments about Harry's manner being "older"...it's too much to imagine he some how went back in time too, so I'm thinking that maybe Ginny just wasn't around him as much first time around at this stage and is just "seeing" what she saw once she was "over" her crush,
Author's Response: Ginny is going to see things differently this time around. It's like seeing a movie the second time, you pick up on new things you didn't see the first time -- or at least that happens to me. :)
Reviewer: Ginzig1 Signed
Date: 2009.01.07 - 11:14AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
Very excited for the next chapters. I'm really enjoying your storyline. I think you are doing a great job writing young (but not so young) Ginny. Her stand against Malfoy was beyond her years, but she pulled if off well. And to Obliviate a teacher! That took some nerve. Looking forward to the next chapters. Great story so far! I'm sure it will just keep getting better.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I really enjoyed the thought of obliviating Snape. :-)
Reviewer: Duelist Signed
Date: 2009.01.05 - 11:29AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
I am really enjoying this story. It is creative, different, and seems that you have a coherent plan for how things are to play out.
Way to go!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I have most of the rest of the story already thru first draft, and the rest of the story outlined. I'm making a few small changes based on reviews, but the story path is completely known. :-)
Reviewer: Phx tears Signed
Date: 2009.01.05 - 11:07AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
I would give you a longer review but I have no criticism to dish out at you :P
The story has gotten really interesting though. I must say i am looking forward to (but also nervous) to see what the bigger ripples she's caused will result in.
Oh ok. here's one suggestion - describe facial expressions of characters talking to Ginny more. Like with Harry - I would expect he'd show some signs of suspicion or at least frown but you didn't (or maybe i didn't notice) anything about that in your story.
good work :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll take the hint on the expressions and see what I can do.
Reviewer: jediprankster Signed
Date: 2009.01.05 - 08:35AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
Excellent! I'm interested to know if she has thought up some fake 'clues' just in case someone asks how she found the Chamber. She did say that all the clues point to it. Your closing A/N mentioned people pointing out the ripples being bigger than Ginny is aware. The one that I'm spottin most obviously is the fact that Ginny is removing many of the events that helped to shape Harry into the man that he eventually became. True, the basic core of his character never really changed throughout the books, but he character was shaped by those events. It will be interesting to see how that particular ripple plays out. Keep it coming.
Author's Response: Thanks! Ginny has all the basics covered for the Chamber. You'll find out in ch 5. Yes, there are several ripples that Ginny is not aware of (and maybe even some I'm not aware of. :-) Like everything else, she'll deal with it as it comes.
Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed
Date: 2009.01.05 - 03:12AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
I'm not sure why the flap over Nagini. Wheth it was a horcrux or not, it like the Basilisk was sentient within the dictionary meaning and understood and recognised Toms commands, and Nagini's bigest command was to protect Tom.
Ginny may not be acting like a first year, but then again Hermione never did either. For different reasons of course. Hermione was brilliant (even though the character irritated the crap out of me) and Ginny is trying to right many wrongs, and she IS older and has been there, done that.
I'm sure some of her acts will jump up and bite her before the story is complte, but the object is to save Harry, so I assume she is willing to take whatever comes her way in order to accomplish that goal.
Did time slow down in that cave...something about Hermione being there for 6 or seven years in real time and not in stasis is rather off putting...at least for Hermione.
This is a great time travel story, with a purpose, which most don't have.
Darian
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you find it great. This story has the same purpose all the rest do: to entertain. :-)
I take the Nagini questions, and some of the others, as fun discussions about what happened in canon. I really wish JKR had told us a few more things in the books. :-/
Ginny is doing a balancing act. Sometimes it fails (tends towards older Ginny), but that's part of the fun. Please note, Ginny is being exceedingly careful around Hermy, as she's always felt that Hermy is the most likely person to catch her. Then again, Hermy doesn't know that time travel is possible yet either. :-) She tires to be careful around Dumbles too, but when she sees a chance to change him, she'll almost always take it, even though that bring risk to her. She does that because she wants to fix the root problem too.
Yes, Ginny is willing to do and take almost anything to accomplish her goal. She has limits, as she won't "go dark" or take advantage of Harry, etc., but she is will to do the "hard things", including playing judge/jury/executioner if required (an outcome of being in the war).
On your Hermy/time question, no. From the final battle to the beginning of the story is about 2 weeks. From then to the time Ginny leaves is another ~10 days. The entire war, from the end of the TwT to the Final Battle in this story would be about 7 years. HTH, Kevin
Reviewer: harry_ginny1234 Signed
Date: 2009.01.04 - 11:44PM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
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Reviewer: DebbieO Signed
Date: 2009.01.04 - 09:29PM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
Wow, this is explosive. Yeah, Ginny's in deep and she's really not pulling off the 11 year old act very well. Just the way she spoke to Madam Pomfrey had me laughing. I think she'd have a few concerned adults watching her very closely by now. I think Hermione will soon become suspicious. Harry seems a bit thick, but he is young and came from a background that would allow for some serious naivete regarding the magical world.
The Dumbledore encounter was unfortunate. Maybe with Ginny being aware of the damage done there, she can do something to repair it. I really loved the Obliviation of Snape. No one ever deserved it more.
Great fun!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you find it fun. :-) Yes, there is a balancing act happening, and in some ways, Ginny is slowly slipping to the "older side". We'll see how it goes for her in the future, but I suspect Ginny would say that as long as she prevents the 2nd Voldie war, she's happy. ;-)
Reviewer: Accio698 Signed
Date: 2009.01.04 - 01:01PM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
It's been bothering me since last chapter that Ginny's going to let Sirius rot for another year since she's waiting on the Dementors. But, If Madam Bones is Minister, isn't it unlikely that she would have the Dementors around the school like Fudge did. In cannon, Dumbledore supposedly fought Fudge on that issue and it was only because Fudge was being stubborn and wanted to seem to be doing something. I would think that Madam Bones would be more willing to hear Dumbledore out and realizes how bad the Dememtors are.
Otherwise, I really like the story. Kick-ass Ginny is a lot of fun and it's interesting to see her affect on the others, making them more mature and objective.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you really like the story. Yes, in order for the Dementors to be there, Fudge needs to be in office, doesn't he? And yet he's not. Hmm, I think ch 10 will clear up the problem for you. :-)
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed
Date: 2009.01.04 - 09:58AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
yes she is jumping the gun alittle but thenagain life is not going to be easy no mater what happens...hope sooner or later she will see this but i also hope she gets her happly ever after...kutgw
Author's Response: Thanks. Yes, life is not always easy, and when opportunity knocks, open the door. :-) Happy endings? Me, write a happy ending? Whenever I can. :-)
Reviewer: hms42 Signed
Date: 2009.01.04 - 09:12AM
Title: Chapter 4 - Opportunities
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