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Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed
Date: 2020.04.12 - 10:24AM
Title: Hurt
Sometimes you just have to let it all out...kutgw
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed
Date: 2012.10.08 - 07:28PM
Title: Hurt
In re-reading this, am struck by what a noteworthy chapter this is: as you bring forward these foundational elements. Both for their understanding of how to navigate the challenges of their life and for Minerva's role in it.
Thanks. Hope the renewed intention to keep writing is going well.
Reviewer: marina4370 Signed
Date: 2009.01.12 - 03:02AM
Title: Hurt
I love this story. Their bond is what I was searching in a fic from long time. Do you have planned on writing all 7 books? I hope so much so and I can't wait to read them all. Thank you for writing and for sharing your story with us.
Author's Response: I do plan to write all 7 books, but it might take a while. I'm glad you're enjoying the stories.
Reviewer: noylj Signed
Date: 2007.03.05 - 02:27AM
Title: Hurt
Uhh...is this the end? Do I mark this "complete" and wait for sequel?
Author's Response: No, it's certainly not the end. There are three chapters left in Part One.
Reviewer: noylj Signed
Date: 2007.03.05 - 02:25AM
Title: Hurt
Oh my God...you have actually let Minnie think about her actions and how misguided they were.
I guess, since Ginny and Harry are having nightmares, that they no longer need to sleep together?
Wait 'til Molly hears...she'll be so happy.
Author's Response: You didn't really think I'd leave McGonagall that way, did you? She's not stupid or egocentric. And she, if nothing else, seems to learn from her mistakes.
There are nightmares and then there are nightmares. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Athea Signed
Date: 2007.03.04 - 12:35AM
Title: Hurt
Oh...WOW! What a chapter! I thought the part of the story with Ginny under the bed and Harry thinking/speaking his agonized thoughts was absolutely brilliant. "Pretty"soft"Yours"better. Terrific. It honestly left me a little breathless. (I'm actually glad we had 2 consecutive snow days so I got caught up enough to do some reading.)
I didn't take time to read your other reviews, so forgive me if I restate things that have been said a million times already, but I liked the character development that takes place in this chapter. Ginny and Harry's decision to face things together (well not just their decision, but their understanding of what happens when they don't) was well-written. I also particularly liked your portrayal of Madam Pomfrey as a strong, intelligent person, not just a character who is "also there."
It is so easy to forget as I read your story (and even the actual HP books) how young the characters are. You really emphasized that with the last scene with McGonagall. Very touching. Not only a great scene for the comfort it brought to Harry and Ginny, but also for the warmth you brought to McGonagall's character.
Oh! And the hug from Fred and George! And Ron's obvious concern as his gaze lingered on Harry's ruined back. And what exactly happened with Hermione? I can't wait for the next chapter! (Can you tell I just loved this chapter?)
Author's Response: If you've read the other reviews now, you've seen that Christine had a similar fondness for those moments. If you haven't, you should at least read her review.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. It's one of my favorites, and you can probably guess that a lot of work went into it. I'm fond of the next chapter, too, so I hope to have it online before too long. Thanks!
Reviewer: johnny1701 Signed
Date: 2007.02.27 - 05:21PM
Title: Hurt
good story can't wait for the rest
Author's Response: Thanks very much.
Reviewer: natjbrown Signed
Date: 2007.02.26 - 10:27PM
Title: Hurt
This has been an outstanding chapter. I do worry about the characters, as they seem to get hurt much worse than in cannon. I've really enjoyed reading it, and I can't wait to see what happens next. I hope you keep this going long after 7/21, although I will completely understand if you need a long break right around then.
Author's Response: I rather felt that canon, especially book one, was a bit sugar-coated. I understand why, of course, but I decided to de-coat it for my story. I do plan to keep right on going after 7/21, and I hope to be finished with DH by 7/22. =)
Reviewer: hjp74 Signed
Date: 2007.02.24 - 06:00PM
Title: Hurt
first of sorry for the late review but i wanted to read it twic before making a commnet as this is one of you more emotonally powerfully chapters.
Dam now that was some chapter given that it takes place over a small peroid of time and there is very little action yet it pack quite a punch. So there bond has been tested forged & strengthened in fire (litrally) like a good sword. so even this early in there lives they have come to the conculsion that they will face all thret agenst them (thats quite a range of charect covered in that stament) together which is good right. On a side point as they are one dose that mean ginny get harrys protection from voldermort and if so they mat=y not have a choice over whare they stay for the summer which i must admit iam egally lookingforward to. hey ive just had a thought is it the house that holds the blood protection or wherever the durdsleys stay because i can defenatly see ginny be much lees forgiving for them then for her own famley.
The other main theam I picked up on in this chapter was the way Dumbledore & McGonagall handeled ther talk with harry & ginny yes i know Dumbledore has a lot more to hide but the defensiv nature of his answere is only driving a wedge in to his relationship with the two of them & there a defenat breck down of trust that was beging to be developed & can see this lack of trust between harry & Dumbledore as a mjour depature from cannon. McGonagall on the other hand freely admits her mistakes & is very open with both of harry & ginny and insted of the incedent damaging there relationship it has actully stengen it & she is now i belive firmly in place a s almost a suragaye mother figur for both student with poppy now also becoming more envolev and having those two formidable women backing them up & leading surport can only be a good thing.
Defenatly looking forwar to the wrap up chapter though i was abit surprised that theres three of them but then i suspect you taking this further in to the summer than the cannon book did.
Author's Response: Their summer arrangements are a hot topic, it seems. You'll find out before long, I promise. But, of course, nothing is ever as simple as it seems. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: ejc Anonymous
Date: 2007.02.22 - 08:37PM
Title: Hurt
I found this story very recently, and have just caught up to this chapter. It is excellent!
I think this has to be one of the best fics I have read in a while, and I very much look forward to seeing more. Particular highlights are the link between Harry and Ginny, their relationship with McGonagall, and the drama involving the Weasley family.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for the kind words.
Reviewer: Ichtys Signed
Date: 2007.02.22 - 11:32AM
Title: Hurt
Hi Dave.
As always the technical parts of this chapter is top-notch (spelling, grammar and so on). However this chapter is dragging on too long. You use just about 12,000 words to describe what happens in an hour (plus the little chat Ginny and McGonagall has in the middle of the night). That is approximately 200 words pr minute, and the pace of the story clearly suffers from it. I know there are people that doesn't mind such huge amount of detail in a story, but I think the story will be better if you tighten the reigns a bit. You need to move the plot forward with every chapter, otherwise it will seem dragged out. Don't use 5 or 10 words when 3 can do. I acknowledge that it can be interesting to learn more about the characters, but don't go overboard with it.
The chapters around Christmas was IMO the best so far in this story: Very intense, action-packed and emotionally charged. Ginny's angry outbursts against her parents is something I will remember for a long time. (Especially the line: "You don't understand, You WON'T understand!")
In this chapter, aside from healing Harry, we just have a bunch of "talking heads", and I find it difficult to keep my focus on the second read-through. The first 15 chapters I think I've read 8-10 times, because the story was that interesting. The chapters here in the spring-term of the school-year doesn't have the same intensity.
I like that you gave more background on McGonagall, I just think you could have done it with fewer words.
I hope you will write CoS more condensed than this last chapter. You are the author so it is your choice, and I will definitely give MoO-CoS a shot, you have more than earned that.
Thanks for writing and sharing.
Regards Ichtys
p.s.: I gave up on finding the music-instrument in the last chapter, could you tell me where I missed it?
Author's Response: A completely valid criticism. And, in fact, it's one I've heard before. I think the core difference lies in the nature of the chapter. There are, to me, two types: plot-driven chapters and character-driven chapters. This is clearly a character-driven chapters, where we learn more about the characters themselves and watch them change in some way. If I've done it right, thinking about the changes in this chapter leads to some conclusions or new ideas about other things, both in the story's past and future.
Some readers don't like the character-driven chapters, and some do. That's okay. As an author, I more-or-less get to pick which kind of story I'm writing, and I personally have aimed for a mix. Some chapters, like 22, are almost all action. Some, like 23, are almost all characterization. Most fall somewhere in between.
With all of that understood, I offer the opinion that this chapter is, in many ways, the most important one in the story, and that justifies its length. It does not directly advance the action of the story, but it provides background, setup, and some resolution for actions in the story's past and future.
I think I might continue this line of thinking on the group. It's a very interesting topic. For CoS, I can't promise a shorter story, but there is a lot more action involved. Thanks!
Reviewer: brad Signed
Date: 2007.02.22 - 05:09AM
Title: Hurt
Exellently written, as always, with the tension full-on for most of the chapter; you painted poor Harry's predicament, the severity of his condition after his encounter with Quirrel, most effectively. Having Ginny there to both react as a mirror image of him, and then give us insight into how he was feeling, really worked marvellously; I was quite worried for them both in the first few pages. I'm so glad he's - they're? - going to be all right :-)
Wondering what the story is behind Hermione's getting through the 'trivial' challenges on the way out with Ron ... ?
"I am still not sure which one of you is confessing" -- heh.
Wonderful conclusion, showing us McGonagall's soft side. Quite a stressful chapter, this one; that was a nice way to finish it!
Author's Response: I couldn't bring myself to give them a really long-term injury this early in the series. It just wouldn't be right.
You'll get Hermione's story soon enough. I rather like it, actually.
Thanks!
Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed
Date: 2007.02.21 - 08:37AM
Title: Hurt
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Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed
Date: 2007.02.21 - 08:36AM
Title: Hurt
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Reviewer: firelordeg Signed
Date: 2007.02.21 - 04:23AM
Title: Hurt
fantastic chapter thank you, please update again a.s.a.p.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'll get the next chapter out as soon as reasonably possible.
Reviewer: Jackaroe Signed
Date: 2007.02.20 - 09:25PM
Title: Hurt
You certainly explained things in detail.
I liked how you tried to get them to focus on something other than Harry's pain.
I also liked how Ginny wouldn't let Dumbledore off the hook so easily, but how Dumbledore played it off while still being polite.
The nightmares seem a little excessive. I'm not sure why they are that strong this time.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: The nightmares are the result of trauma causing a sort of dam to burst. That's the simplest way I can think of to explain it. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Jimm Signed
Date: 2007.02.20 - 08:05PM
Title: Hurt
Good chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: CodeRomance Signed
Date: 2007.02.20 - 05:20PM
Title: Hurt
oooooh that was a very good chapter! i love this side of mcgonagall! and dumbledore argg! he makes me mad sometimes! but anyway good chapter and update soon!
Author's Response: I feel sorry for Dumbledore. He's a wonderful and good man who has discovered that even 'wonderful and good' can sometimes be bad. Thanks!
Reviewer: nreiff Signed
Date: 2007.02.20 - 04:43PM
Title: Hurt
I love this story. I don't know where to begin with saying how much I love this story, but I do.
Author's Response: Thanks very much.
Reviewer: Comet Moon Signed
Date: 2007.02.20 - 01:24PM
Title: Hurt
Oh yeah. How many chaptters have you desided left anyway?
Author's Response: Three. Two of them are closely connected, though, so I plan to post them closer together.
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