|
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.04 - 03:12PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Love that you have Tonks and Remus together in this story! I still have numerous questions about Ginny, and I'm wondering if you have been dropping hints that I've missed.
Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.08.22 - 02:27AM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Well done chapter though I will say that you are going through things very slow though I usually love that in your case I am very anxious for you to get a move on in some part of your story though i can wait since your story is so well written though i will keep telling you cant wait for you to move along farther in Harry's realationships with your chars.
Author's Response: You've left a whole chain of reviews. I'm going to lump them all together for one response . . .
Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2007.04.15 - 07:10PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
No Review
Reviewer: Codex Runicus Signed Date: 2007.01.26 - 03:54PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
No Review
Reviewer: MagicalHalo Anonymous Date: 2007.01.22 - 05:19PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
This is a great story I really enjoy it!! I started reading it sometime ago I just don't do many reviews.
I like the way this is written and I love the suspence also I like how this isn't all fluffy and romancey between Harry and Ginny. I like this Harry probably because in ways if you ask people about me they'll say that I am to some extent like him. I like the way you made all the characters not just Harry, it's good see something different.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it, and eventually you felt strongly enough about it to share some thoughts. I like to think that my characters have depth - motivations, concerns, plans, and then they all have to work around reality. Some have grand visions, and some just want to make it through the day. The fun part is what happens when the visions collide. The next chapter should be up soon, it's just pending validation.
Reviewer: Mike Signed Date: 2007.01.20 - 02:36AM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
WOW, this stroy is great. You have definetly become one of my all time favorite authors.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Thanks for the thoughts.
Reviewer: Sovran Signed Date: 2007.01.19 - 11:15AM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Everyone seems curious about the book that Neville did not want to read. Me, I think I can hazard a guess or three. What I want is to see you try to write one or two of the options.
The fight in this chapter was good, and caused a couple of head-slap moments. But that's the idea, right?
You already know this, but I can't help liking that Ginny is getting more 'screen time.' It's not the interaction lots of people want, but it's reasonable, accurate, and entertaining. And we all know that the very best first gift you can give your future mate is shoes, right?
By far, the most interesting line of this chapter was simply "Yesterday?"
Aren't aurors fun?
Author's Response: I wrote an interesting response, but SIYE puked. So, in sum: Who would publish it? Is that a rug I see before me? If the shoe fits. Tomorrow and Yesterday are too woven to see the light. Depends on the auror.
Reviewer: Drummer321 Signed Date: 2007.01.19 - 12:56AM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Another outstanding chapter. I am quite curious as to what book made Neville so flustered; care to tell?
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and leaving feedback. Your question, like most of the ones raised in the story, will be answered. Eventually.
Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 10:44PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Great chapter. Wish I didn't have to wait as long for it, but I don't want the quality to go down.
I really wish Harry had hexed off the left sleeve of Lucius' shirt/robe before others arrived.
Seriously though, that would be a great spell. If the victim isn't a Death Eater, all you've done is mess up someone's clothes in a way that can be easily repaired. If they do have the mark, you've exposed them publically.
Author's Response: Ah, the wait, the wait. Real life can be a pain, can't it? If only they would pay my beta team and myself and let us not work... Your idea has merit, but everyone knows LM has the mark of the bunny. Now, how The Mark works in Echoes is yet to be revealed, but I like to think people will enjoy some things coming into the light... The next chapter, as per usual, is just pending validation.
Reviewer: sideline Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 08:56PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
The best thing about this story is that every character feels like a person. We've all seen the many fics with soap opera dialog, post-steamroller characterizations and instant coffee romance (cheap, tasteless, and a mockery of the real thing). I Moshpity the fools that give Harry a corvette and a Platinum card from Deus Ex Machina Inc.
I love that things go wrong. The bad guys aren't paper tigers or Bond movie extras. Harry actually shows his personality flaws. Don't listen to the story pace bears. If Jack Bauer can kill 50 terrorists and stop a half a dozen deadly attacks between the hours of 6AM and 7AM you get give Harry a long day.
Cheers,
Joel
Author's Response: Somehow, I try to avoid letting what Hollywood does in its unimaginative self influence what I may do. While the sentiment is nice, well... your complaint is ringing in the choir. I suspect Sovran might have even more fancy words for it, but it's all the same thing. Now, how do you make the Mr. T comparison with a straight face? That said, some of those Deus Ex fics are widely acclaimed. So where does that leave us?
Reviewer: parakletos Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 06:29PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
The problem with such an involved fic is that the chapters always seem to short. From a posting point of view I know why you do it, but it does frustrate me. I know, pot, kettle and all. ;-)
Author's Response: Why, hello there Mr. Pot. As a Kettle, I have to say it's rather horrifying what people tend to throw at you when you're not prepared. How do you stand it all? Now that you've been prepped a teensy bit ahead, you may find the next chapter interesting. Assuming, of course, it validates sometime soon.
Reviewer: Chreechree Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 05:33PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
"I wanna hold your hand."
"Take my hand. You know I'll be there if you can"
"Slight of hand and twist of fate. On a bed of nails she makes me wait."
"Grab that cash with both hands and make a stash."
"But my hands were tied. The bleeding hearts and artists let him get away with murder."
"All alone, or in twos, the ones who really know you, walk up and down outside the wall. Some hand in hand..."
"And so today, my world it smiles, your hand in mine, we walk the miles."
"Need a woman gonna hold my hand and tell me no lies, make me a happy man."
"With blazing eyes you see my trembling hand. Then we know the time has come lose my senses, lose command. Feel your healing rivers run ."
"Raise your hand if you're Sure!" (Snort.)
And then... why not?
"I cannot put my finger on it now. The child is grown. The dream is gone."
Hee hee hee hee. Yes, I'm enjoying myself entirely too much.
Author's Response: Now I haven't forgotten this fun review, but I owe you a proper response. One of these moments when I have copious free time to do so, I will :)
Reviewer: calgary Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 03:46PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
You know, I've noticed that even though Harry thinks he's running circles around Ginny (including the twins and her mum), I don't think he's realized that Ginny can still slam dunk him. Tonks seems to think she can get the better of him. I wonder if something is going to going to come around and bite him.
Loved the action sequences. I would think they are hard to plot out as you write.
Terrific story
rachel
(I'm, girllspell at PS)
Author's Response: You're sneaky. Different sites, different names, and different writing styles. I'm onto you now, though. All becomes clear with time. As for the thoughts you expressed... it does seem a bit, well, cocky for Harry to just assume things are rolling along his way, doesn't it just? And yet, the story is being told from his PoV ... for now. I enjoy writing the action sequences quite a bit. I have who goes down and in which order, the location, and a visualization of the terrain. I know the types of spells and twists I want, and then I let logic and all those years of training dictate what's going to happen next -- barring the twists already planned, of course. Glad you're enjoying this little tale. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Reviewer: hjp74 Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 12:52PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Another fanstatic chapter with anothe great fight scean defenatly liked how harry finishes it.
Its good to see the old pre fight ginny beging to emerg again & i just hope harry dosent get to badly burened playing with that particuler fire. iam very curious to see what book hermione wouldnt want to read.
As for the pacing of the story having just re read it from the start i found it to be spot on & consedering you just plunged harry stright into the 5th year ther start of term was always going to be very detailed hope fully as the year progresses well get to see some of ginnys the twins ron & hermiones back story unflode as well as i suspect it colud be quite a bit diffrent.
on the subject of back story i have a couple of questios about harrys katana
1) is it part of a set ie dose he also have the smaller blade as well.
2) is the katana standard war mage issue or is it something particuler to harry
3) Dose it have a name hopefully something poetic
James
Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. Fire does have hazards, does it not? But it's so much fun to play with. Much of the back-story is still unfolding with the plot line. By the end of the series, you should know all of the major bits, and a good fraction of the minor, with enough hints and clues to tie it all away neatly. With the katana... (1) yes, he has a wakizashi, (2) particular to Harry, (3) not like you're thinking of. Cheers!
Reviewer: Treecat Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 03:23AM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
No Review
Reviewer: GinnyMarie Signed Date: 2007.01.17 - 10:53PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
okay...loved the chapter...
i was interuppted breifly by a need for being giddy and talking girl talk, but it has passed....although...i can still be seen to wear a big grin on my face...
i would love to know what the book neville saw was....care to share with the audiance?
and that battle was interesting...for some reason, i knew that something was wrong with filch immeditatly...hmm...maybe im omnecient...
:D
erm...lemme think...
i liked how you introduced tonks...she fell on harry...classic her...truly classic...
love her comedy...
i cant really think of anything else...my brain is being a tad slow today...and im sort of tired...but rest assured i loved it...
im going to comment on Pratfall in here, as im too lazy to open up another tab and go review again in PS.net...
i like your sense of humor...its interesting...care to share what stories you parodied? i could pick out some fo them, but not all...
i relly liked it...again too lazy to go over there and comment on it...heh...
okay...im off now...loved this chapter, and hope you update soon...~Ginny M~
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. And the sense of humour -- surely by now you appreciate how varied such things can be. If not, you could ask my betas how many times they have had to run screaming. The odd thing is, they keep coming back for more. If you're omniscient, I must say, you should have noticed something was wrong with ol' Argus some time ago. Have you been sleeping on the job?
Reviewer: Jackaroe Signed Date: 2007.01.17 - 09:46PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Well it's been quite a busy day for Harry.
I enjoyed the fight scene but I'm surprised that Cyril was defeated that easily. I liked the bubblehead charm to end it.
The scene afterwards went well and I enjoyed him talking with the twins.
I still wish I knew what the big plans were for making money, it seems quite interesting, especially if Lucius getting caught helps them out.
It seems that Harry is starting to like Ginny more than he realizes.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: A day of days, is it not? And yet, nothing is ever quite what it seems. Was Cyril defeated easily? That does remain to be seen... In Chapter 22. And you'll get some more clues in Ch22 as well. I know, that's teasing, but that's how it goes, eh? Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Reviewer: Frelling Signed Date: 2007.01.17 - 08:35PM Title: Chapter 20: Inflection Points, Part 4
Another excellent chapter! I don't usually read AU (this and NoFP are the only ones I like) so that's quite add bonus points to my praise.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying this story. Speaking of AUs, if you haven't considered Sovran's MOO, you might want to give it a try. If you do try, get through the fourth chapter before you decide whether you enjoy it or not. Thanks for reading and leaving feedback.
