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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.02 - 09:32PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
I hope Harry is ready because I am quite sure that Hermione has numerous questions for him at this point. While I completely understand the temptation, Harry should perhaps avoid any more pranks.
Reviewer: ElusiveEvan Signed Date: 2009.05.16 - 08:10PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Fair warning. I'm probably going >.>
Author's Response: You've been trapped between two operators? Cheers.
Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.08.20 - 05:53AM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Very well done I am not going to lie I personally think you do more with sub chars than any author I read. (I consider Fred, Gerorge, and Neville sub chars) I love the way your including more people into the story though I am a bit sad that Ron hasn't played any part yet. Though will say very good job on Harry's new mentor loved that the way Harry has been messing with Hermoine that he does the same things to Harry.
Author's Response: You've left a whole chain of reviews. I'm going to lump them all together for one response . . .
Reviewer: janepotter Signed Date: 2007.07.30 - 06:40PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
RAPE! HELP! REVIEW RAPE! SOMEONE IS RAPING MY REVIEW! BUGGER OFF, YOU'VE NO RIGHT!
Whee. I just had to do that...
Author's Response: I see you're another one of those multi-site personas, or else your choice of name is replicated here and at PS-net. That said, I'm glad you're able to chuckle over things. Even if they might (or might not) be cliche. Anyone with a good sense of humour is quite welcome here. Cheers.
Reviewer: The Seeker Signed Date: 2007.05.24 - 10:27PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Thanks for giving us a chapter where we could relax and catch our breath. Even in this relatively even tempered chapter, you left several threads that could prove very interesting: the conversation with Floppy (dangerous to sort now), Cyril and his impact, and Harry's detention, though it could be a ruse.
Loved how you brought out Harry's sarcastic humor. The prank on Snape was great, especially the "mind rape" protestations. Also appreciated how you've drawn Neville and the twins, and how you're slowly drawing Hermione in by having Harry appeal/tease her intellectual curiousity and competitiveness. While showing off, Harry's activities in his two classes and in the Great Hall seemed to have at least a slightly positive effect on the multitude. We can only hope he's seeing the benefit of being nice . . . nice -- though the concept seems somewhat foreign to him. -- Jim
Author's Response: I've moved all your comments (PM and here) into one long review.
Reviewer: Wooster Signed Date: 2006.09.18 - 09:41PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
I am especially fond of your borderline OCD Hermione, your absolutely loyal Neville and your ridiculously perfect twins. (They really are great.)
I am enjoying watching Harry try to make nice-nice. Too bad nobody will talk to him outside of the twins, Neville, and Hermione. He's really quite funny!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and leaving feedback...
Reviewer: Rocky235 Signed Date: 2006.09.02 - 01:11PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
"Well, it sort of feels like a wolf smiling at sheep..."
Another one of many wonderful lines.
The scenes with Fred and George are the best I've ever seen with them.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, and leaving feedback. I've responded to all your reviews based on the last one you left...
Reviewer: Dragen Signed Date: 2006.08.25 - 08:25PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Harry hasn't got many friends at the moment, partlt his fuart, but at least he has got Fred, George and Neville on his side... maybe he has got Hermione too... we'll soon see.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I'm lumping all feedback for you under your last review.
Reviewer: Chreechree Signed Date: 2006.08.10 - 05:14PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
I don’t think I commented on this exchange with Floppy when I was beta-ing. How remiss of me. This is particularly interesting, especially as Floppy said that sorting Harry at that time would be dangerous. That’s particularly intriguing. Would it be dangerous because he would go to Slytherin and, in that house, be vulnerable? Or would placing Harry in Gryffindor make him an even bigger target? It is true that expectations of loyalties and general disposition would change once he gets into a house. Hmmmm. Don’t bother to whistle. I don’t need to hear it.
I think the strudel line is still my favorite of the chapter (well, that and the legilimency alarm), and that’s saying a lot as you had plenty of amusing stuff in there.
~ Christine
Author's Response: Is it a bad thing when my betas can write my review responses for me? Hmmm. I'll have to think about that. Since you already know, I won't mention how much whistling is being done here, or whether it's evil or innocent. Your imagination will suffice.
Sorting is a binding contract of sorts. What exactly goes into the contract is as yet unspecified, but a few comments were made much earlier in the story about some aspects... Not to be confused with Sovran's definiton of "aspect" of course.
Reviewer: GinnyMarie Signed Date: 2006.08.09 - 01:56PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
"RAPE! HELP! MIND-RAPE! SOMEONE IS RAPING MY MIND! BUGGER OFF, YOU'VE NO RIGHT!" ....that is awesome...i love harry's sense of humor in this...it is slightly similar to my own...he is very sarcastic and i love it...i want to read more, so please update soon...i love it...and ron is a prat, but that was funny as hell...snape and the cloak thing is brilliant...i also loved the switching him from the head of Slytherin thing...Trelawny...thats a gasp in surprise moment if i ever did see one...the Pestet-Harry-About line was good....Hanging the strudel.....love it....and why dont they just fly from class to class?....how did you get the writing at the beginning of the article so big?.....look forward to more...update soon...love it...~Ginny M~
Author's Response: Harry definitely has a sensor of humor that's somewhat more sarcastic. I attribute it to his extended time with Remus and Sirius and Edgar, personally, and deny any efforts to accuse me as the author of injecting my own warped humor into him. Really. Honest. (Now if only my betas will skip reading this response...)
To answer your specific question on the writing/font size... use a "font" tag... dropping the angle-brackets "<" and ">" brackets in case the engine here is going to recognize them, use 'font size="+2"' or +1 in order to get the effect.
As for the rest... more twisted humor is coming. But it's entirely Harry's humor. Not mine.
Reviewer: ginnypotterforever Signed Date: 2006.08.09 - 12:25PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Great chapter! The pranks were great! And is it just me, but I got really confused during the "Someone's raping my mind" part...
Author's Response: Thanks for the feebdack. The "mind-rape" part was a tie-back to the earlier chapter, where Harry had the rings constructed... Chreechree warned me that some people may not recall sufficient details to make the connection. I'm sorry that this story doesn't seem to mesh well with the serial fanfic posting scheme...
I hope it's more clear in hindsight or with the next chapter...
Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2006.08.09 - 02:06AM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Awesome chapter!!!! I loved the prank on Snape!!! I also loved Ron summoning himself to the door! I loved Harry riding his broom through the halls (and agree about the stairs)! Snape trading his positions with Trelawney was brilliant. I'll bet she's actually good at potions! I also loved the show he put on in Charms! Basically, I loved the whole chapter and can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it. Things will shortly start to pick up the pace (yes, I know, I've been saying that) but the next chapter brings a close to all of the major setup efforts... and time becomes more flexible. Stay tuned!
Reviewer: Treecat Signed Date: 2006.08.09 - 01:55AM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Woohoo! I have my name mentioned! I'm so honoured! Great chapter, even though I'd already read it.
Treecat
Author's Response: Thanks for contributing your time. One of these days I'll even get you to cut loose and send me a three line email!
Reviewer: GWeasley Anonymous Date: 2006.08.09 - 12:32AM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
I really like this chapter it was very funny! I love the dinamic between the twins and Harry its great! Can't wait for the next chapter, so keep up the good work and update ;)
Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with me. The twins have so much potential in the stories, I'm always sad to see them relegated to just joker status. The next chapter will be here soon...
Reviewer: Sovran Signed Date: 2006.08.08 - 09:45PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
Oh no. You admitted something. In relatively plain English. The world is ending! Run for the hills! That way you'll die first and not have to suffer through the rest!
Fun chapter. Cyril is interestingly mysterious, and the various indignities Snape suffered were entertaining and completely justified.
It's nice to see Ginny recovering a bit.
Newton a squib? That would explain a few things.
Author's Response: I still stick to what I said earlier. I show you what's in this hand so you have no idea what's over there, no there, no here, no...
Really, isn't it obvious that Newton had to be a squib? He knew there were invisible forces running the world... For that matter, what about Einstein or Maxwell or Currie? (smirk)
Cyril and Ginny shall continue to be interesting. Are you still convinced that the story is really about Ginny?
Reviewer: matthias delario Signed Date: 2006.08.08 - 09:26PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
So my all-time favorite bit in this chapter was when Harry got around the rules of not using spells in the hallway. Very creative on your Harry's part. I enjoyed it immensely.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. Harry has a bit of a penchant for knowing the rules. After all, it's best to know what you're getting in for, right? Of course, there's more to it than that...
Reviewer: Breanie Signed Date: 2006.08.08 - 08:37PM Title: Chapter 12: Seeing
good chapter
Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with me...
