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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.01 - 08:30PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Frightening scene at the end! I'm left wondering who was killed, and who set up Harry and why.



Reviewer: Hawk29 Signed Date: 2013.03.26 - 07:04PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Great story so far! I had passed this one over when doing searches a few times thinking I had already read it. When re-reading Sovran's Meaning of One, he gave you enough credit that I came looking for you again and realized I hadn't read Echoes of Power. First chapter hooked me, but I've been reading at work and typing out the sort of review your story deserves is a pain on a tablet.

Your story so far is awesome. Fantastic execution. You've taken some familiar concepts (Harry is trained outside Hogwarts, returns late in his school years), and made a story as interesting as any I've read. While nothing so far is *revolutionary*, your extreme attention to detail and intelligently constructed scenes make your story an absolute joy to read. You're treating us humble readers as if we're intelligent and able to grasp subtleties in speech and action, and it pays off. Your writing style, but just as much your attention to detail, make Echoes of Power really rewarding to read so far.

Specific to the ending of this chapter, I have to say I quite enjoy a story where the friendly forces match the escalation of force the bad guys use. That is to say, 90% of the authors refuse to allow Harry or any character to kill in self-defense, and it's refreshing for you to allow Harry to respond appropriately to attempts on his life. I'm not sure if you're going to try to tie the War Magus concept in to the morality of taking life, or if it's just your style, but I like it nonetheless. In too many stories, Draco Malfoy or some other antagonist makes repeated attempts to murder Harry Potter or his friends, and they never meet justice. Or too often, authors fall into the trap of thinking that the taking of life is so immoral that none of the "good guys" should use deadly force, thus they run into pitched battle attempting to stun or immobilize hardened Death Eaters (and when it works, they get broken out of prison and rape then murder busloads of children).

I like the interactions of the schoolchildren so far. Harry/Ginny have that cute flirtatious attitude in their relationship, but even beyond the main pairing of the story, I like your interactions between Harry/Hermione, and Harry/Fred/George. I'm very interested in the backstory of Ginny you alluded to in this chapter, and to see what long-term fallout it has on the Harry/Ginny dynamic.

Thanks for writing the story, and I hope you decide to come back and finish it off. I'm very much looking forward to delving deeper and if the writing is half as good as it has been so far, I'll have the story polished off in no time and be craving more.



Reviewer: hgromance Signed Date: 2009.02.25 - 09:39PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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I love the fact that Harry has to go around with the Sorting Hat on his head. I also love the play between Harry and Ginny.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Their dynamic is a long, twisted, confusing one. It does what it needs to, though, for both of them.



Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.08.19 - 05:45PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

Hmm well Harry does have some serious deep seated problems to work through. While I don't think he has recovered from it so there for took it to far do think that yes he probably in cannon even had most of these problems.

Author's Response: You've left a whole chain of reviews. I'm going to lump them all together for one response . . .



Reviewer: Rocky235 Signed Date: 2006.09.01 - 10:52PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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"...Harry was almost certain that sparks shot from cloven feet with each step he took and that smoke exuded from his ears. "

That is a great line. The fight scene was concise and fast paced. Wondeful!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading, and leaving feedback. I've responded to all your reviews based on the last one you left...



Reviewer: Dragen Signed Date: 2006.08.25 - 06:56PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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I love this story, and how its going... I can't wait to see what happens next... I hope Harry's and Ginny's outrageously flirting stops soon and they start dating, as they are both shrited for each other in this story, better then the book I believe. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I'm lumping all feedback for you under your last review.



Reviewer: murgel Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 12:16PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

I SURELY HOPE you iupdate soon, for your sake!

What a brilliant chapter! I just do not like the cliffy.
The fighting scene was particulary good. The act of instinct and training coming over very well. And by him not realising incomming friendlies you even brought on his lack of previous "to the death" experiance.

Author's Response: I've noticed a few people seem to get double-reviews posted. Glitch in the system, a browser problem, or..? Hmmm. What's your browser/platform? I'll make an enquiry of the admins.



Reviewer: murgel Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 12:16PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

I SURELY HOPE you iupdate soon, for your sake!

What a brilliant chapter! I just do not like the cliffy.
The fighting scene was particulary good. The act of instinct and training coming over very well. And by him not realising incomming friendlies you even brought on his lack of previous "to the death" experiance.

Author's Response: Again, updates happen as they happen. I try to be on a fairly quick cycle, but real life does get involved.

I'm glad you're enjoying the story.



Reviewer: Treecat Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 06:57AM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Erk, that was gory, there are going to be serious repercussions, except he's a war mage. He can expect attempted retribution though.
Treecat

Author's Response: Repercussions? Quite. Retribution? Mmmmmm.



Reviewer: Ginnyrules Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 05:11AM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Excellent chapter once again. I was just wandering if he actually killed the attackers, remember although he is a trained war mage he is still a teenage boy!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it. The end result will be made clear soon. This appears to be a side-effect of how the rather explicit fate of most combatants was removed for "too much detail" reasons.



Reviewer: Chreechree Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 04:05AM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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You know, Josh, I love seeing you torment your readers with ‘whistling” and other vague responses to their queries. It’s good to know it’s not just Cel and me.

As for your response to my last review (*drumming fingers on table*), where’s my Firewhisky? Oh, and I did appreciate you using my favorite Freud quote as it is one of the few truly useful things he ever said. I know how important he was, especially in pop culture, but eesh his methodology was ridiculous. Psychoanalysis really doesn’t work (Freud’s own case studies show that as his patients didn’t get better). My uncle is actually a practicing Freudian psychiatrist. Oh the shame! There are so many useful branches of psychology too.

I must say I’m a bit confused at a couple of the reviewers who don’t seem to understand that Harry just carved people up and others got blasted, so, no, the four who were attacking him didn’t fare well. See, I liked the full gore version for a reason. Red misty head explosions and phrases like “bleeding to death” are hard to misconstrue. Implied disembowelment just doesn’t have the same impact as seeing the intestines. Snicker. My hat must go off to Sovran for the excellent catch with the chapter titles (something I never commended you on but was quite fond of, incidentally). And from Sovran’s first review, your little remark about muddying the waters – clever and all, but, oh Mysterious and Elusive One, you’re in danger of sounding like the Sphinx from Mystery Men. Snicker. Oh, and nice Alanis jab. Now, I like her just fine, but that song - *shudder*. You and Adam were on the same wavelength as he used to lament how she was confusing an entire generation of English students who would forever confuse irony with crappy coincidence. Oh the inanity!
~ Christine

Author's Response: Perhaps torment is in the eye of the beholder? (smirk)

The chapter titles do carry hints in them. That's rather obvious by now. What level of hint and all is something I can't really get into. Yet.



Reviewer: murgel Signed Date: 2006.06.20 - 03:18AM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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I SURELY HOPE you iupdate soon, for your sake!

What a brilliant chapter! I just do not like the cliffy.

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. Updates happen when they're ready, which means I'm done wrting, the betas have finished, and all edits are okay. The first part is clearly the most critical, but I don't want to skimp on the other two either.



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 10:53PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

moody is off to his house, will Barty Couch jr. be returning? good second half.

Author's Response: Glad you're still enjoying it. You know I can't answer that question, right?



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 09:10PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Reviewer: covenant64 Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 07:57PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Bloody Brilliant story so far! I like the slow buildup of the H/G relationship. I do hope that the issue with the cnahge that Ginny went thru was not due to being raped by Malfoy. So far, I am really liking this story and it's possibly the 2nd best AU HP story I've read ( next to Intromit's Fate's Debt ). Your dialogue, characterizations and world build are well done indeed.

Author's Response: Several people have asked about this. I think I'm going to stick an A/N at the bottom of the next chapter whenever it gets finished.

For the record, No, Ginny was not raped.

I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Thanks for the feedback.



Reviewer: ttestagr Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 06:47PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Damn, very good fight scene! You have me wondering who attacked him, though it seems that Ginny and the twins were people at the end

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I'm glad you're enjoying the story...



Reviewer: Breanie Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 06:11PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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ok - im not even sure what the hell happened at the end here - these r students (Slytherins) attacking Harry? ad with really dark magic - that poor girl, lost her arm and a hole in her stomach - so shes dead then? i see the R rating - very gruesome indeed and very well-written.

Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying the story. What happened at the end will be explored soon...



Reviewer: hoser41 Anonymous Date: 2006.06.19 - 06:02PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Great chapter yo. I especially like the action scene at the end.


Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it...



Reviewer: Sovran Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 04:06PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

Sorry, I thought of something and simply had to drop in another review. The chapter titles fit very nicely and give a useful clue (now that the phrase is complete, anyway). Harry's basically steamrolling his way through hogwarts, doing things as he pleases and getting rather cocky about it, until he gets stopped cold by something he didn't expect or predict. I like that a lot. It actively keeps him from being a super-harry, which I know is not what you intend.

Point: the text in the final paragraph says the two boys were down on the ground, but doesn't specifically say if the girl was or not. I'm assuming she wasn't, which is very interesting. Am I wrong, or is that a deliberate point of mystery?

Author's Response: As I do to others (notably my betas):

Whistling innocently.



Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2006.06.19 - 04:03PM Title: Chapter 8: ... until opposed

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Great chapter. Make sure to update it quickly because I hate cliffhangers!

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it. Sorry about the hang... it's inevitable, as annoying as they can be.




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